THAT GIRL

I see a girl who is only fourteen

Have you ever wondered where her smiles have been?

Did you ask why she bleeds tears?

Can't you see she is drowning with fears

Every day she wakes up her dreams die

You called her a liar 

Never asked why she had to make up lies

I face her every day

She wishes to die

How can I see which no one else can see

Only cause that girl is me

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is emotional and touching, conveying the fears and uncertainty of growing up. The only thing I might suggest (and it's no big deal, really) is to alter slightly the last two lines. They might read 'How can I see what no one else can see. Only because that girl is me.' Or not. It's a fine poem.

[Bye Guys]

Loved it and its sad cause allot of people can relate to this poem.

[Amanda]

I liked this a lot. I think you meant liar instead of lair though. Anyway, keep writing! :)

[T. Logan]

Sad but very true. So many people are depressed, and nobody does anything about it, or doesn't even realize it.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

So sad. I loved it, an excellent poem. Keep writing!

[Lina Grey]

I understand this. The words remind me of myself, but the feelings remind me of Behind Blue Eyes (A song by The Who). No one can save that girl but you, and you have to try, because if anything happens to that girl, you're the one who has to deal with the consequences. And trust me, that isn't worth it.
Well, as you can tell from my sudden one-or-two-sentence-mini-rant of advice, your poem is very touching. Thank you.

[harry]

wow ...pretty deep ....good job

[Laura Maidah]

I used to be a compulsive liar. I still sometimes catch myself in the habit. This really resonated with me. Nice.

[Arun Paul Kapur]

Nice poem =]

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Some misspellings but a great poem, btw, don't feel like that ! Never wish to die ... you live in Canada, what can be so tough in such a great country?! :)