THAT GIRL

I see a girl who is only fourteen

Have you ever wondered where her smiles have been?

Did you ask why she bleeds tears?

Can't you see she is drowning with fears

Every day she wakes up her dreams die

You called her a liar 

Never asked why she had to make up lies

I face her every day

She wishes to die

How can I see which no one else can see

Only cause that girl is me

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is emotional and touching, conveying the fears and uncertainty of growing up. The only thing I might suggest (and it's no big deal, really) is to alter slightly the last two lines. They might read 'How can I see what no one else can see. Only because that girl is me.' Or not. It's a fine poem.

[EileenMarie]

Very good, so young but so bright! Excellent poem

[Mockingbird]

expresses much emotion for a young girl. sounds like she's in despair and wanting comfort. great job.

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

i really liked it great job sis!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Dez H.]

Good s**t. I like this one.

[HopelessRomantic]

I like the revelation at the end

[J. F. Charleston]

That was really good. I think it brings lots of reality to writing. :)

[Olivia Marie]

Very deep, very depressing. I know girls like this. I liked how you pulled it together at the ending. Nice.

[Skye]

So sad, but for many, very true. Too many can relate to this, still, its a lovely write. I liked it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

An emotional and guding piece, well done, good read.