Your poem is emotional and touching, conveying the fears and uncertainty of growing up. The only thing I might suggest (and it's no big deal, really) is to alter slightly the last two lines. They might read 'How can I see what no one else can see. Only because that girl is me.' Or not. It's a fine poem.
This was a dark read for me. You took me into your heart and mind and in that I have to say, very well done. I believe a writer is good when they can do just that.
Not being a poet myself I don't have anything to offer in critic other then I enjoyed reading this.
I believe wanting to die because of a break up or something isn't very smart, considering what life has to offer. One relationship looks irrelevant if you look at the larger picture.
Anyways, I liked the poem, though the rhyming is a bit inconsistent.
Great piece. Short but deep though I agree with Pencrafter about altering the last two lines for a better read. Aside from it, the poem is almost spotless.
Wow, this poem is very deep and very real, it not only refers to you but to a lot of people out there who feel exactly like that, it is a very powerful poem and I am very intrigued by it, it is very very well written, and like I said very very powerful. It shows a side that not everyone see's, it shows the truth behind how so many of us feel... I like this poem a lot, I'm so favoriting this
That was interesting to me, :)
I thought at first : this is going to be outside prospective of you
Then I got to "You called her a liar" then my mind switched to dat of you talking about someone else you notice, and then...
the last line i was like "iknew it" except not really
Btw this is really good I really like its variety in line length, but still maintains its nice flow