DREAMS

DREAMS

A Poem by afra

Tears flow from heart
Which has been torn  apart

Blood flows from pain
Which never seem to drain

Love flows from feelings 
Which always seem to be hurting 

Dreams flow from your brain
Which gives you hope to live again

© 2012 afra


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I like the sad-to-uplifting theme going here. Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I loved the ending which was unexpected. I think that "seems" would have worked better then "seem". I also find it interesting that you stopped using end-rhyme at the middle of the piece. Also the whole piece seems to be couplets strung together. With this poem, it works. I also think that stopping the end rhyme added to it in a way. I do wish you would have changed the line "Which always get hurt" to something different. However it works :) The whole thing is amazing, and hopeful. These are just some nit-picks. I enjoyed reading it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


what can i say besides i love it great write loved it!!!!! and again i think you're a terrific writer

Posted 12 Years Ago


In the third couplet, it kind of throws me off because it's the only thing that does not rhyme.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very true. Interesting poem-I like it. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Actually, dreams are part of your brain, technically. Have you taken psyche yet? The dreamscape is pretty interesting. And I'm fairly certain you mean "the heart"? Otherwise it's a little uncomfortable. The second and third stanzas blow me to pieces everytime I read it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very nice words, a lot of truth in them

Posted 12 Years Ago


Just as love seems to never last, pain also is a fleeting deer, it too shall find it's path
back to happiness the only thing we can do about the past is accept it. lovely write :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


shows hope and resilience.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Toronto, Mississauga, Canada



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