DREAMS
A Poem by
afra
Tears flow from heart Which has been torn apart Blood flows from pain Which never seem to drain Love flows from feelings Which always seem to be hurting Dreams flow from your brain Which gives you hope to live again
© 2012 afra
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wow this was short but amazing each line pierced me...very true and very NICE
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Wow powerful in such few words. As everything flows and drain from the the rips and pains in life and the dreams you wish to make of them. Well done.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Wow powerful in such few words. As everything flows and drain from the the rips and pains in life and the dreams you wish to make of them. Well done.
Thumbs up ! The only thing is that the third couplet doesn't rhyme, but it still is good.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Thumbs up ! The only thing is that the third couplet doesn't rhyme, but it still is good.
Very nice poem. Short but deep. Keep it up!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very nice poem. Short but deep. Keep it up!
expressive and beautiful. thank you for sharing.
Posted 12 Years Ago
expressive and beautiful. thank you for sharing.
This poem expresses the ups and downs, the negative and positive and how we all want to have hope! Good write!
Posted 12 Years Ago
This poem expresses the ups and downs, the negative and positive and how we all want to have hope! Good write!
One of your better ones.
How about:
"Love flows from feelings
Which is always healing"?
Posted 12 Years Ago
One of your better ones.
How about:
"Love flows from feelings
Which is always healing"?
Okay. The third couplet kinda of throws it off a bit. I doesn't rhyme like the rest of them and it interrupts the flow.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Okay. The third couplet kinda of throws it off a bit. I doesn't rhyme like the rest of them and it interrupts the flow.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I noticed that the third couplet is the only one that doesn't rhyme, not sure if that was intentional or not.
Other than that, wonderfully bittersweet piece.
Posted 12 Years Ago
I noticed that the third couplet is the only one that doesn't rhyme, not sure if that was intentional or not.
Other than that, wonderfully bittersweet piece.
Dreams flow from your brain
Which gives you hope to live again --> I like this stanza... really inspires me.. haha GREAT WRITE.. thanks for sharing
- Kuhr gred
Posted 12 Years Ago
Dreams flow from your brain
Which gives you hope to live again --> I like this stanza... really inspires me.. haha GREAT WRITE.. thanks for sharing
- Kuhr gred
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Added on June 19, 2012
Last Updated on June 29, 2012
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afra Toronto, Mississauga, Canada
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