I'LL END UP WITH A BLADE

Graves of memories are present inside my soul

Hopes are drowning through the scars and holes

Which are made by the arrows of lies

Every day I wake up to watch my dreams die

I cover myself with a smile

And show that I am fine

Life is moving fast

But I am still living in the past

Maybe I am too slow

Or maybe I am against the flow

When your life becomes a lie

How can you not wish to die

As I watch all my dreams fade

I know I'll end up with a blade

Reviews

[GunMetal]

"may be i am to slow ,
or may be i am against the flow ," - to should be too. And maybe is one word. If you stick with "may be," is becomes an incomplete sentence. "It may be that I am too slow," would be correct, for example.

"graves of memories are present inside my soul" - Great first line!
The title alone is pretty frightening and speaks volumes. Keep working on your craft. You show a lot of potential.

[eglantine]

I would take out most of the commas. The fact that you already use line breaks to signify a space, a pause means you don't really need a comma after each line. I like the first two lines the best, interesting image of the soul akin to a collinder.

[Emrys Realmskip]

I love this!! :D Its so awesome