I'LL END UP WITH A BLADE

Graves of memories are present inside my soul

Hopes are drowning through the scars and holes

Which are made by the arrows of lies

Every day I wake up to watch my dreams die

I cover myself with a smile

And show that I am fine

Life is moving fast

But I am still living in the past

Maybe I am too slow

Or maybe I am against the flow

When your life becomes a lie

How can you not wish to die

As I watch all my dreams fade

I know I'll end up with a blade

Reviews

[GunMetal]

"may be i am to slow ,
or may be i am against the flow ," - to should be too. And maybe is one word. If you stick with "may be," is becomes an incomplete sentence. "It may be that I am too slow," would be correct, for example.

"graves of memories are present inside my soul" - Great first line!
The title alone is pretty frightening and speaks volumes. Keep working on your craft. You show a lot of potential.

[Legolas]

Very sad

[Pax]

very sad, indeed so much emotion hidden in the imagery you wrote.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Before i say anything:
"every day i wake up to watch my dreams die"
"but i am still living in the past"
"how can you not wish to die"
your last verses are so meaningful, they resume perfectly their stanzas, people could spend a whole day thinking of them, very well done ! The atmosphere is sad, the sentences are strong and stay in the reader's mind, i enjoyed a lot the first two verses, where you mixed words linked to a physical plane (graves, scars, holes) with words linked to the emotion plane (soul, hopes, memories, lies), very sad ending :(
PS: good flow and sonnet structure, different kind of rhyme but it's cool anyway :) Just check for misspellings, i caught some

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

This is very sad yet how many feel. I like it as it is simple and to the point of emotions that are not simple at all. I like this, thank you for the good read

[Lindsay T]

Chilling and straight from the heart. You have a really truthful way of writing, everything in your poems is so right it's scary. Amazing job.

[mariah]

i LOVED the middle stanza! very true for some people, i though this was very relatable. it really did come from the heart :)
-mariah

[allie_arrowz]

i like the first stanza the most

[Rusty]

I like it. Incidentally I was in Mississauga in March for three days.