DREAM

I can be the reason of your smile or tears

I can give you hope or let you die in fears

I can snatch your smile

Or can make you happy, but for a while

Some give up some follow me

But in their minds I'll always be

Somethink I am real, some think  I am fake

Somethink I am a big mistake

The people who believe me with their heart and soul

I can help them achieve their goal

Some people love me, some people hate

But I'll haunt them every night, I'll not fade

I can give you smile or scream

I can be described in a word called dream

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Ok Afra...This is just absolutely outrageous!!! How dare you take such a simple word and turn it into a symphony, a masterpiece, I feel like I have been beatin to the ground by your words!!!! I am gonna call the police about this type of harsh treatment!!! LoL Seriously though...I just don't get it...How do you make such brilliance like this...You damn Canadiens, why do you have to be better at everything?!?! LoL Afra this is just exactly what I am talking about...When you put your mind seriously to the grindstone look at how razor sharp it becomes!!! Keep this up and I might have to call you consistantly great...Please don't do that to me!!! LoL

[afra]

thank you soooooooooo much

[Michael G.]

Very well written thought. A lovely look at dreams. An enjoyable read.

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is interesting, making a person out of the dream mechanism. You're a good writer so I'll assume you intended to do some of the quirky things in your lines. Using 'Somethink' twice, in the middle of the poem, establishes almost a visual pivot point. And in the fifth line you could probably split that up into two sentences, separated by a period, leaving it on the same line. Or leave it all as is.

[ewest1220]

Very unique. The individualism and strength is what I like most about this work! Great job!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I love this. It's unlike anything I've read on here. Excellent write.

[Brittany]

Wow. I'm impressed with this description. Very well done.

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Great job! This is one of my favorites of yours! Well done!

[T. Logan]

I like this! The rhyme scheme keeps the flow of it well. I wish it wasn't a dream. People can be whatever they want!

[quixotic_rose]

I like this, its.. catchy I would say. I love how you could be this or that and how at the end your really just a dream. loved it :)

[teddy]

wow ..amazing...good work and keep writing

[harry]

its was type of a riddle in the start ...good job