DREAM

I can be the reason of your smile or tears

I can give you hope or let you die in fears

I can snatch your smile

Or can make you happy, but for a while

Some give up some follow me

But in their minds I'll always be

Somethink I am real, some think  I am fake

Somethink I am a big mistake

The people who believe me with their heart and soul

I can help them achieve their goal

Some people love me, some people hate

But I'll haunt them every night, I'll not fade

I can give you smile or scream

I can be described in a word called dream

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Ok Afra...This is just absolutely outrageous!!! How dare you take such a simple word and turn it into a symphony, a masterpiece, I feel like I have been beatin to the ground by your words!!!! I am gonna call the police about this type of harsh treatment!!! LoL Seriously though...I just don't get it...How do you make such brilliance like this...You damn Canadiens, why do you have to be better at everything?!?! LoL Afra this is just exactly what I am talking about...When you put your mind seriously to the grindstone look at how razor sharp it becomes!!! Keep this up and I might have to call you consistantly great...Please don't do that to me!!! LoL

[afra]

thank you soooooooooo much

[RedInk524]

Dreams, like them or not they are a part of you. With personification you captured and portrayed everything a dream is and can be. A very good descriptive write, i am always fond of those, especially when the thing being described is being personified so that more life is given to the poem.
Looking at this, i thought it would be a sonnet since it has 14 lines. But the iambic pentameter is absent.. Not that thats bad or anything. But, if you gave the effort i think you could turn this into a nice sonnet.
You may want to take a look at lines 11 and 12, the last words do not rhyme. Other than that, good work.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like this, perhaps fix the "somethink" to some think, instead. Besides that, nice emotion in the poem.

[Shay]

It is very well written and good. I like the added emotion

[Tai Ryens]

Dreams are what you make of them, and you say this skillfully as you compare yourself to the dreams that may uplift or haunt the dreamer. Well done.

[Dominique]

I like the idea on this. How you gave the discription of a dream is wonderful. Great write.

[Peaceworker22]

Some think. Brilliant work, this poem is so true it isn't funny. So many people's dreams are shattered when reality comes knocking at your door and it can make them bitter. I hope I can achieve my dream because it seems so far out of reach.

[JewelsIsabella]

WOW!! Is all I can say unless I wrote a huge review with tons of adjectives and such on how amazing this is...this was...wow!! AMAZING!! (and totally true)

[Bare trees]

I find this all to be so true. Dreams help people or they can hurt them through nightmares. I've woken from some dreams laughing, others I couldn't fully recall but it affected my day and mood. There something we can't escape, like little deaths in the night. Good poem.

[That_Girl]

Needs a lot of editing but the idea is nice. :) I liked it.