LOVE ME NOW INSTEAD

You will realize that my tears were not fake

You will forgive all my mistakes

You will finally see my invisible love

You will realize that I was a gift for you from above

You will say that you loved me

You will sleep every night with a wish to see me in your dream

My thoughts will occupy your head

You will remember all the crazy stuff I have said

You will realize I was a good daughter and a good friend

All when my life will end?

Are you waiting for me lie on my grave bed

Please love me now instead ...

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Thank you Afra...You are proving yourself to be at one point a shimering glass of sparkly champagine and then at the other end just a plain glass of tap water...This, I am sorry to say, is the latter....The ending is very good but the rest of it kinda reads like an 80s slow hair band song....You have proven to me time and time and time again that you can just blow me away with a masterpiece and then shove something out there that is well for lack of a better word...Plain....And that is not you...You can do better...MUCH better...

[Walker Andreasen]

This poem makes me kinda nervous... afra, are you ok? You sound kinda suicidal here...
Good read though!

[afra]

i am okay ...thanks for asking

[Walker Andreasen]

Yeah no problem. Just making sure.

[afra]

thanks

[Keith]

Nice twist at the end. I was thinking of lovers for the first two section.
This is a really bittersweet plea. You captured a deep sense of longing here.

The only thing that drew me away was:
My thoughts will occupy your head _ (Did you mean "Thoughts of me will..."

Thank you for sharing this. I truly enjoyed it.

[Johnny Joe]

beautiful and intense

[Celestial Witch Child]

Whoa. Very intense love poetry. I like it.

[TheJordBaker]

very moving piece, emphasised by that great last line. really powerful.

[Bye Guys]

I have to agree its really sad. love the poem.

[harry]

so true people love you more when you are dead ....awesome ....good job