LOVE ME NOW INSTEAD

You will realize that my tears were not fake

You will forgive all my mistakes

You will finally see my invisible love

You will realize that I was a gift for you from above

You will say that you loved me

You will sleep every night with a wish to see me in your dream

My thoughts will occupy your head

You will remember all the crazy stuff I have said

You will realize I was a good daughter and a good friend

All when my life will end?

Are you waiting for me lie on my grave bed

Please love me now instead ...

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Thank you Afra...You are proving yourself to be at one point a shimering glass of sparkly champagine and then at the other end just a plain glass of tap water...This, I am sorry to say, is the latter....The ending is very good but the rest of it kinda reads like an 80s slow hair band song....You have proven to me time and time and time again that you can just blow me away with a masterpiece and then shove something out there that is well for lack of a better word...Plain....And that is not you...You can do better...MUCH better...

[Shay]

wow this is amazing, very deep and pure.. i love it

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I truly love this one and it's quite depressing but also well-written! I love the feelings that are released into your poem that your readers can sense and relate to. Great job, Afra! :)

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[Leigh]

Very strong words, powerfully written

[Lee Loud Lewis]

woww, very emotional !

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Emotional write, nice one.

[Barbara Walker]

Second to last line, are you waiting for me TO lie on my grave bed? You are a great writer, but the rhymes in here felt forced. It not one of my favorites of yours. Sorry.

[kublakhan27]

Not much else I can add to the compliments already given...powerful piece :)

[Pencrafter]

Such a sorrowful sentiment! Your poem expresses how we often overlook the good qualities of others, not giving it much thought until they are gone. So the lesson is--tell people how much we care about them, or what they do, right now, while we can. A compliment is an inexpensive way to help someone.

[Ama May Cooper]

Ouch, what a hard hitting and raw piece.
Honest and clearly presented...Very powerful
Short and simple in language but still gripping to read.

[Kevin S.]

Very emotional, which I like. It shows how good a writer you are when you do have the strength to pour in a lot of emotions. Amazing job!