I HAVE FOUND MY LIFE IN YOU

I HAVE FOUND MY LIFE IN YOU

A Poem by afra

I will walk behind you

And break all other ties

I will leave the path that

Does not lead to you

I will attach my all dreams

And hope with you

I will break all my other relationships

With a smile for you

I will only maintain a relationship 

Of heart with you

I will give you my everything 

I'll give up my life for you

My life is now attached with yours

I have found my happiness in you

My heart will beat with the beat of your heart 

I have seen my heaven in you 

I will love you forever 

Cause I have found my life in you

© 2012 afra


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afra
I know I am not good at writing love poem ..but still tell what you think

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This poem has a gentle, friendly feel. It speaks of commitment and attachment bringing joy and friendship. I like the way you repeat the expression 'in you' throughout the poem, focusing the reader's attention on the recipient. Hopefully, the offer will be reciprocated.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A lovely soft love poem...much enjoyed :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Mirror sibilancy of "I" and "you" is effective. The intimacy is heartfelt

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gentle as a breeze, nice write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Cute piece. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


awwwwww so sweet ur amazing!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is actually so sweet! And not cheesy at all! Which is hard to do with a love poem. I really like how you write about making sacrifices because you love this person. Good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Indeed love poetry is difficult, but you have a quality piece here. (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well Afra, much better than "That Guy"....The only problem I see with this write is the word you, you used you more times than you really should've....I no it focuses on a you but you Afra can still turn this into gold...The one thing that I notice about you is that you are so young and you write of things that most people in their 30s have never experienced....You have youth on your side and that is a big thing for you...I think you write amazing and fantastic work but you are inconsistent with it....I believe in another three years if your still writing poetry you are going to be spitting out masterpieces like it was nothing...As for this one and "That Guy" Well lets just say I know you can do WAY better...I used the word you 12 times in that review you (ok 13 times) used it 9...Sooo maybe not so bad ;o)

Posted 12 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem has a gentle, friendly feel. It speaks of commitment and attachment bringing joy and friendship. I like the way you repeat the expression 'in you' throughout the poem, focusing the reader's attention on the recipient. Hopefully, the offer will be reciprocated.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is beautiful poem of love. To know and appreciate the gift of love is poetry itself. I like the way you told how love was important and needed. I like the positive ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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