MY HERO

The person who will fight the world for me 

The person who means everything to me

The man who always there to wipe my tears 

The man who always fights away my fears 

The angel who showed me how to love 

The angel who protected me when I was weak as a dove 

The guy who spent his teenage life working for me 

The guy who lives in hell just to give me a happy family 

The hero who burns himself just to give me light 

The hero who always shows me the right 

The dad without him I don't know where I would be

The dad who's little girl I am proud to be 

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Again, with so many reviews on the shelf there's probably little I can add. And if someone else already mentioned what I'm about to say, forgive me and move on. One question on the content or story line. In the middle verse you mention the "guy who spends his teenage life". Was this still referring to your dad? Also, the third line you could say 'The man who will always wipe my tears'. The next-to-last line instead of "The dad without him" you might say 'The dad without whom'. Your poem is wonderful as is. I'm just trying to offer something. I don't think it's right to just mouth repetitious praise like a rubber stamp on everyone's work. My honest opinion I will always give, only after I've actually read a piece several times and given it careful thought.

[Brittany]

I agree with the "whom"
Also I am assuming that your dad was young when you were born; hence, the 'teenage life' but perhaps it should be 'spent' rather than 'spends'

[Aiden Aloysius]

Very close to being a sonnet! ike it!

[afra]

thanks

[....]

I love this piece, it's so poetic. I love it

[afra]

thanks

[harry]

great write .... very sweet ....i am sure he will love it ...keep it up

[afra]

i will thanks

[Grace Catherine C.]

This is so sweet. You're lucky to have a dad like him and he's lucky to have a daughter like you.

[afra]

thanks

[Praiser]

Awesome , Great job, super write

[afra]

thank youuuu

[Peaceworker22]

'The guy who lives in hell just to give me "a" happy family' I like this, it's written quite well. I hope to be an awesome father someday if I ever find a beautiful woman who would be able to gently break down these walls I put up and look deeper than the surface. Good work.

[afra]

thanks

[Peaceworker22]

You are welcome.

[afra]

=)

[Amanda]

I like it cause my dad and I are really close. Keep it up, afra!

[afra]

thank you

[T. Logan]

I think in the third line 'me' should be 'my' otherwise i read it with a Scottish accent. :P
This is cute though! I love the whole dad-daughter relationship.

[afra]

oh ...i have corrected it ...thanks

[Skye]

I adore this poem, mostly because i'm a daddy's girl myself. Wonderful to read and nicely penned.

[afra]

thanks

[darkness*star1985]

Aww that is sweet, i wish i could related. But i Like how you worded this, very nicely down, sometimes a dad needs to hear that he is our hero for all he dose for us with out a second thought. very good write, i enjoyed this mostly

[afra]

thank you