BAD DREAM

I know its not that good ...just random stuff that come in my mind

Tears started falling from my eyes like rain

Pain started running through my every vein

As soon as the police officer told me about your death

I keep asking the officer to tell me that its not true

That my husband has died

But his reply broke my heart into two

My world was fallen apart

As soon as I realized that you are no longer with me

Never knew our love story would have this part

If I knew this was our last goodbye

I would never let you go

Why did you leave me alone , please tell me why?

Just then I woke up

And  you were  sleeping next to me

And I realized that it was just a bad dream

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Some dreams are warnings to appreciate the people we love and care for. A sad poem with a good ending. Dreams are only possibilities. In real life we can hold on tighter. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[afra]

thanks

[Serenity]

Wow your poetry amazes me with its beauty and power, each word leaves an impact on the reader that stunz them into amazment, like it stunz me (I know thats not how you spell it) but your poetry is truely incredible

[afra]

thank you

[Destinyxi]

My world was fallen apart
As soon as I realized that you are no longer with me
Never knew our love story would have this part

I love that part. The love story. Very nice write!

[afra]

thank you soooo much

[Matty Bosox]

This is a great example of your talents Afra...It seems to me that although this is great for a short poem...Good wording and a very excellent ending, something you are known for...It seems like you didn't even try...Like you just sailed through this until it ended...And it is still GOOD!!! Imagine if you put all your effort into poems like this....I think Edgar Poe would roll over in his grave TWICE!!!

[afra]

lol ...thanks ..

[Dez H.]

I like this that would be a be a messed up dream. good s**t

[afra]

thanks

[zainul]

Your dream was the result of some apprehension for the dear ones that stay in the subconscious mind.
Do you apprehend such events frequently?

[afra]

yeh ..sometimes

[zainul]

Then write more poetry.
Think good things only.
Just layman's prescription.

[afra]

okay ...i will ..=)

[zainul]

How about praying before going to bed?

[afra]

yeh it would help ..thanks

[zainul]

You are very nice and cooperative.
Have a nice sleep without bad dream.

[afra]

thank you so much sir ...

[zainul]

THANK YOU TOO

[Shauna Jacqueline Ander..]

Firstly; You're right yourself it does need a little work, but I don't think it's nearly as bad as you think it is [remember you always view your own work differently to outsiders] There was one little bit that didn't seem to make a lot of sense while reading; Verse 2, sounds like she WANTS it to be her husband thats dead but I persume the husband IS dead? [my minds a bit foggy today so it might just be me being fairly simple] But yea, other than that nothing negative to say. Got potential. Keep it up.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Huh cool. This was Awesome Nice job

[afra]

thanks

[Pax]

simple and well thought out. nice.

[afra]

thanks

[Shay]

I like this alot, fun to read and pure emotions

[afra]

thank you