DEAD

I know this is a bit confusing but still tell me what you think

I am your wife

I am the person you called your life

But why are you ignoring me?

You are not that person who you used to be

You never listen to what I say

You just turn your back on me and walk away

Why are you ignoring my tears?

Now you don't even notice me living here

We are like two strangers living in a same home

I am living with the person I love, but I still feel alone

Every night I can hear you cry

Why aren't you talking to me?, please tell me why

You stare at my picture and cry

I have forgiven you, that's not a lie

But all my complaints were gone after what your friend said

"I am sorry to hear that your wife is dead "

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Now this is what I knew you were capable of Afra!!! You knocked this out of the park...Your ending to this poem would make M Nyte Shamalan (Mispelled probably) jealous!!!! From start to end you made this good, better, GREAT!!! I have read your efforts before and you have made good poems without even trying it seems...Now this is what happens when you let your talents off the leash, they go MAD!!! and make this....Close to perfection!!!

[afra]

aawwwwwww thank you sooo much ...=)

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Great write, I was shocked by the ending as almost everyone who read it. Loved the poem and your writing in general... keep at the good work!

[afra]

thank you

[harry]

at first I was like I hate this guy but then in the end I was shocked to hear about his wife ..... awesome write ...I loved the twist in the end .....just like the blind one ..

[afra]

thank you harry

[harry]

harry potter ..okay

[afra]

okay harry potter

[harry]

=)

[Debbie_Philly]

Oh great twist.... I was going to say I understand about being in a relationship like this... but I see at the end he cant see you because your a spirit.... great twist !!

[afra]

thank you .....I hope every thing in your life gets better

[Debbie_Philly]

Besides my health.... which could be better ..lol... the love life is on hold... and the ex was a great muse...lol. but its good now... we are friends !! Thank you !! :)

[afra]

welcome .....i am glad to hear this

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

WoW this was great it is so hard when a loved one pasts away and like for a second i thought he was like ashamed of himself for something then when it said that she was dead i was like whoa i was not expecting that! it was beautifully written, the flow was perfect the word play gorgeous! and overall it was a beautiful write! great job chicka you killed it!!!!! 100/100

[afra]

thank you sista ....lol .....

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

lolz :D anytime :P

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Woah! Nice twist! I love your poem, though it's very sad.

[afra]

thank you ...TG people are understanding it

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Yea

[Skye]

Wow, I did not see that coming. At first I was like, what is that guys problem, then woah. Wonderful poem!

[afra]

thank you ...i thought it might be a bit confusing