DEAD

I know this is a bit confusing but still tell me what you think

I am your wife

I am the person you called your life

But why are you ignoring me?

You are not that person who you used to be

You never listen to what I say

You just turn your back on me and walk away

Why are you ignoring my tears?

Now you don't even notice me living here

We are like two strangers living in a same home

I am living with the person I love, but I still feel alone

Every night I can hear you cry

Why aren't you talking to me?, please tell me why

You stare at my picture and cry

I have forgiven you, that's not a lie

But all my complaints were gone after what your friend said

"I am sorry to hear that your wife is dead "

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Now this is what I knew you were capable of Afra!!! You knocked this out of the park...Your ending to this poem would make M Nyte Shamalan (Mispelled probably) jealous!!!! From start to end you made this good, better, GREAT!!! I have read your efforts before and you have made good poems without even trying it seems...Now this is what happens when you let your talents off the leash, they go MAD!!! and make this....Close to perfection!!!

[afra]

aawwwwwww thank you sooo much ...=)

[Barbara Walker]

Oh, you twisted this very well! "the" instead of "a', as in, "We are like two strangers living in the same home." Excellent write!

[afra]

okay ...and thank you

[darkness*star1985]

WOW, didnt see that one coming... for good writed but very sad. i like how you wrote this thinking that one was crying and ignoring you for a different reason then the very truth... excellent write...

[afra]

thank you

[mariah]

interesting twist at the end! this was so sad, but very good. your very talented, my friend ^-^
-Mariah

[afra]

thank you

[mariah]

your welcome :P

[Krista Weiss]

Really good!!! :)

[afra]

thank you

[Secret Lullaby]

Wow I really liked this (: It kinda reminds me of the movie " Sixth Sence". Loved it

[afra]

thank you

[dukovan]

*sense

[Secret Lullaby]

wow I even get corected on a review

[quixotic_rose]

Ohmygosh! thats so awesome! well, its not awesome ya know cause she's dead, but it's awesome how you twisted that. sneaky sneaky! I thought it was also funny at the end with her hearing that she's dead. Amazingly written, I really enjoyed this :)

[afra]

thank you

[Amanda]

ohhhhh snap, plot twist. I like it, it told a story, without so many details. I think it's sad and kind of creepy at the same time. It flowed nicely which was good. As always, keep writing. Your works are very emotional and they hit home. :)

[afra]

thank you

[eeoopig]

Wow a very enjoyable read :) I love the ending, where she turned out to be a spirit - it was quite an unexpected twist! Well done, I love it :)

[afra]

thank you

[Wolfwind]

Fantastic work of ink! The piece brings one into it and leads them right down the road to a twisting flow of change at the end. Much enjoyed!

Aaron

[afra]

thank you

[CHRIS ANDES]

i like the tragic end
mirthful write
=]

[afra]

thank you

[CHRIS ANDES]

no prob
=]

[afra]

=)