Resurrection

Watch me rise.

At my final hours, you were a Pharisee.

You kept faithful vigil til my last breath,

Muttered prolix prayers--curses in secrecy,

And sacrificed me to your god of death.

 

You anointed me with your apologies,

Clothed me in a sanctimonious shroud,

Buried me in eternal quiescence’s ease

In grievance’s grave--with your head bowed.

 

You laid my corpse in a Lenten coffin,

Constructed from the elements of your vows.

You lulled my soul with the eulogy of sin,

With reminiscences for me to espouse.

 

But my sepulchral nights expired

When a miracle fashioned breath into me.

I bless your passionate errors which conspired

To transform me to a faith’s prodigy.

 

 

Author's Note

Conceived from an idea to play with words related to 'death' and to experiment beyond the usual rhyming words.

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

This may be one of the most beautiful poems I have read about life after death. There is a somber reverence in your words, almost like a prayer:

You laid my corpse in a Lenten coffin,
Constructed from the elements of your vows.
You lulled my soul with the eulogy of sin,
With reminiscences for me to espouse.



But my sepulchral nights expired
When a miracle fashioned breath into me.
I bless your passionate errors which conspired
To transform me to a faith’s prodigy.

[Blue]

I am honored. Thank you, Anne!

[Scott Metro]

Very nice...a bit of darkness with a flavor.
Enjoyed your experiment..

Scott

[Blue]

I enjoy your visits, Scott. Thank you so much!

[Scott Metro]

You're welcome.
S...

[Nusquam Esse]

I like this one, your flow of words on this one was top tier! I don't really see much wrong here, it seems very solid; but I will try to offer constructive advice all the same. I honestly struggled with the font, I would either change it to something easier to read, or just increase the font size slightly. Besides that, I think that confessions may be a better word choice than apologies, given the theme of this write; although perhaps you were using apologies for alliteration? Also, the line "When miracle" feels a bit off, I would either make miracle plural, or add 'a' to the beginning. I am also thinking that dropping 'a' from faith's prodigy may work better, but this is just a feeling.

[Blue]

Aww... I love that font style. That's what I use when I type on MicrosoftWord and it keeps me going. I like how it makes me 'struggle' to understand the words and not simply breeze through them. Well, I guess, it's more of a hindrance for others. Pardon my choice of font, I changed it now for more readability. :)

Yeah, I used 'apologies' for alliteration. And about adding and deleting articles, I am not sure. Your suggestion makes sense (as always) especially about "When miracle". But I think I shall retain the 'a' in the last line.

Thank you so much, Nusquam!

[Blue]

Hey, one last thing. Do you think a colon works better than a period in the first line?

[Nusquam Esse]

Honestly they both work. The period is a more solid end, but the colon makes the following line serve as a description or reasoning. If it was just the two lines, I would go with a colon; but with 3 lines below all being part of a sentence, a period is probably better. Ah, and I don't mind the font, it was just too small for my poor eyes.