Mutual Surrender

hmmmm

I lust after the geometry of your being,

poised on top of me to explore,

like a birthday present waiting to be

u n w r a p p e d...

I pull you closer to me,

closer than the spaces of our kisses,

defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh

until we become

consumed with the fire void of chaste intentions,

slaves to the urgency of the moment

...and y-yesss

let's pour out our words of love into this feverish motion,

unrestricted by rhythm,

unbounded by time--

until we lose ourselves

and find ourselves

in each other

collapsed. . . . . . .in mutual surrender

Author's Note

Okay, it's been quite a long time since I last wrote a poem. Unlike before when I could write nonstop, this one took ages. Any comments would be welcome. :)

Reviews

[DrD]

It may have taken ages, but it will also be remembered for ages. I love your passion and eloquence of expression. There are times when words convey more than meaning and this is one. I was enraptured by the urgency of this writing and enjoyed it tremendously. Extremely well done.

[Brook]

I think this is very clever, yet romantic. It's beautifully written, and i really enjoyed it. Well done, Arzel. :)

[Blue]

Thank you, Brook!

[Cryingkate]

Great job ! I followed Scotts review here and knew it was a good one !
100/100

[Blue]

Haha, thanks, Kate!

[David Scott]

I can see how you let this write mature in your mind and how your refined it on the page. Much like lovers who have spent months exploring the wonders of the passion only to find the greatest joy was simply in the surrender to the process and become one with the experience.

I found this write very alluring Arzel.

[Cryingkate]

Scott don't you ever get enough? LMBO... I had to come see this write, cause I just know if I follow the dog I'll find the sausage LOL. I could tell by your review it was a good one :-)

[David Scott]

Your calling me a dog now... ha.
Arzel did a good job with this write I think.

[Muse]

David is no dog. He's my beautiful one horned mule. ;)

[Cryingkate]

LOL.. Just teasing..... calm down my fellow pack hounds LOL

[David Scott]

Ha! Yes dear Muse. As you are my wise and diligent elephant with a memory to match... I certainly am not a Unicorn to most people I think... Yes, an a*s fits me just fine most days.
Love you much Muse. Good to see you.
Whe are you going to give me something new to review of yours btw? :)

[Muse]

You will have to buy it on Amazon. I will let you know when. I was ummm...gonna say a*s, but I didn't know if you'd remember. xo

[David Scott]

My memory is better than you might think... I'll buy it for sure.

[Muse]

It might test your conceptual way of thinking. I've mixed erotica with satire. I guarantee it to be an original....I'm about 2/3 done. Cover is complete. I had to back off from here almost 100% to stay focused.

[David Scott]

Sorry for having a conversation on your page Arzel... You should delete it so it does not clutter your page. I did enjoy your work very much. You are a bright young writer!

[Muse]

Sorry Arzel. I have a history of being rude... crashing the party every now and then.

[Blue]

Not a problem. In fact, I enjoyed reading your conversation. :) Thank you so much for appreciating my work. :)

[Hatchling]

Amazing write! Thanks for sharing

[Blue]

Thank you so much!

[Calibaster]

This is a little … graphic. :) You always were good at that sort of thing.

[Blue]

Graphic? ;) My, I didn't ever think I'm good at that. :) But thanks for saying otherwise. :)

[Calibaster]

You're very welcome! It's a good talent, … (one that I lack.)

[Simon Welsh]

I love the intensity within this. Keep it up :)

[Blue]

Thank you, Elliot!

[Costa Siwale]

Incredible, the scene you create is intense. This one I like, well done

[Blue]

Thank you, Costa!

[Costa Siwale]

Incredible, the scene you create is intense. This one I like, well done

[Blue]

Why did you have to write your comment twice? :)

[Costa Siwale]

Hehe, was that good I forgot I had commented,lol was just an error

[Blue]

Haha. Thanks, anyway!

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow.. This is fantastic! You did a wonderful job pulling me in. I am consumed by your words and my heart won't settle. You blew me away with this. :)

[Blue]

Thank you, Madalyn! It's a pleasure to read your reviews.

[kublakhan27]

Wow my friend, just wow...my heart rate may not settle for the rest of the day now haha Every stanza turns up the heat a little bit more, then collapses with the satisfied exhaustion of mutual surrender. A sexy and beautiful poetic journey you've laid out here :)

[Blue]

My, thanks, Steve. That's a great review.