Just like...

a summer memory

I gave you my trust.

You broke it.

Just like how you broke my innocence

ten summers ago

between the numbers of hide-and-seek

behind the bushes

while twilight embraced the earth.

Just like how you embraced me

from my back

as you whispered in my ear

a plea to keep quiet

so as not to be discovered.

I stayed silent.

Just like how you silenced yourself

when you pressed your weight

on top of me

and your hands explored

what's beneath my clothes.

I looked at you.

You smiled.

Just like how you used to smile

during those innocent days

of climbing trees

and chasing rainbows.

You're the older brother I never had.

I ran away.

Just like how I run away

from affections of men,

still scared and scarred...

And summers were never the same again.

Just like me.

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

innocence lost....;;a great theme for a love poem that moved from childhood to young adult hood.
nicely worded.

dana

[Blue]

Thank you a lot, Dana.

[Mark]

A tragic story. Well told. Now I'm sad.

[Blue]

"Now I'm sad" made me laugh, Mark. I'm not sure if that's the response you intend to receive by that statement. :P Thank you for dropping by.

[Mark]

Heh ya never know. Without context we have to add our own to someone else's words. :)

[Chaz Hemsworth]

This is so raw, so vivid. The mixing of elements really adds a hint of what I'm going to call irony. The short and long stanzas add to a bluntness in the poem. The meter plays off this well. I can't say that I "enjoyed" reading it, but I'm glad I did.

[Blue]

Wow, thank you for this wonderful comment, Chaz.

[Lovely Pattie]

Writing about it takes strength because you can go back to this moment every time you read this. I feel your words and your struggle.

[Blue]

Thank you, Lovely.

[AngeloRosell]

The emotion is so radiant... very powerful, very well written. I sense the pain that's felt just from these words, and it amazes me how such pain can create something so beautiful. Great Piece !

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Angelo.

[CoraZanini]

love it.absoulutely love it,so much feelings:)
keep me informed!

[Blue]

Thank you, NonameRa.

[Mia C.]

So triggering. This gave me a knot in my stomach and a sharp pain in my heart. Very well written. You did an excellent job, love.

[Blue]

Thank you, Mia.

[Madalyn Beck]

This is absolutely heartbreaking.. Wonderfully written and so many lines were so simple, yet so deep in the context. You did a fantastic job with this!

[Blue]

Thank you, Madalyn.

[Sami Khalil]

Soooo touching and heartfelt...Bravo.........................

[Blue]

Thank you, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......................

[Baby Ricochet]

This is kinda heavy and can be taken several different ways. Good one

[Blue]

Thank you, BR.