Just like...

a summer memory

I gave you my trust.

You broke it.

Just like how you broke my innocence

ten summers ago

between the numbers of hide-and-seek

behind the bushes

while twilight embraced the earth.

Just like how you embraced me

from my back

as you whispered in my ear

a plea to keep quiet

so as not to be discovered.

I stayed silent.

Just like how you silenced yourself

when you pressed your weight

on top of me

and your hands explored

what's beneath my clothes.

I looked at you.

You smiled.

Just like how you used to smile

during those innocent days

of climbing trees

and chasing rainbows.

You're the older brother I never had.

I ran away.

Just like how I run away

from affections of men,

still scared and scarred...

And summers were never the same again.

Just like me.

Reviews

[Praveeta]

I am deeply touched by your poem. May you find peace within.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Praveeta.

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[Leslie Philibert]

A poem full od drama, honest, well written...

[Blue]

Thank you, Leslie.

[AYVID N]

Very stark and moving. Your narration was very convincing and good.

[Blue]

Thank you, Divya.

[Blue Ivory]

Very nice opening lines. Strong. The rest of the poem is very well organized. Each stanza with its own element. The ending too is very strong. It's like you open like a hard cover novel, the contents as if they are pages in comparison, containing words of a story very worthy of praise and in the end, again, a hard cover. I am touched by your contents, actually. This is a very good poem. I can't seem to put my finger on what makes it so, but this is quality work. Congrats! Is this your story?

[Blue]

Hi, thank you for this review! This is the best comment I've received on this poem, wow.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

I applaud the courage of your pen here! I relate to this much more than I care to remember. Thank you for sharing such an experience, I admire this type of release and bravery.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, PH.

[Pryde Foltz]

You're the older brother I never had.




I ran away.


Just like how I run away
from affections of men,
still scared and scarred...




And summers were never the same again.
Just like me.

May you find the strength in you, its there, to move beyond the this and into a greater sense of love. You are sharing and already you will help others.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Pryde.

[Angel]

How sad...
I just do not understand what the thrill is that so many seem to find in taking a child's innocence. However, it seems to happen all too often. It's just too familiar a story.
Why?

[Blue]

Thank you, Angel. I wish I knew why.

[redflutterby]

The darkest betrayal of childhood....innocence stolen. Poignant and heartbreaking....I'm sure this was hard to express. Well done.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, AMS.

[Tina Louise UK]

Just heart wrenching...what should have been beautiful memories..destroyed by selfishness. This touched a nerve for me x

[Blue]

Thank you, Tia.

[DaughterNature]

Oh my goodness. This sounds like a painful memory. The emotion is definitely there, but do you mean it to sound more painful? I mean, this definitely gets the idea across, but the poem feels more like a bit of prose that you reorganized into poetic lines. Maybe if you took some time to reassign some wording?

[Blue]

Thank you for your suggestion, DN. I sometimes like to make my poem like a prose.