Thoughts For Thoughtless

You never really feel an emotion until you experience it.

Say your boyfriend cheats on you.

So your best friend helps you out, but she’s never been cheated on.

 

Say your friend’s parents start fighting.

You try to help out, but your parents have never fought.

 

Say you see the report of a young girl being ‘messed’ with

Now she is pregnant.

You pray for her,

But you don’t know how she feels.

 

Say that one outcast in your homeroom annoys the living heck

Out of everyone.

You tell them to stop,

Because you know how he feels.

 

Are our hopes and wishes thoughtless lies?

 

I believe so, on occasion, and I believe not, on occasion.

Sometimes, when there’s nothing to do

I randomly review peoples work.

That isn’t thoughtless. I know.

 

Sometimes, when there’s nothing to do

I mow the yard, clean my room

Wash the dishes, help with laundry.

That isn’t thoughtless, right?

 

A small child picks a flower.

The clouds shine on her.

She picks this flower for her grandpa.

That isn’t thoughtless.

Author's Note

Please, if you have the time, tell me what emotions you gathered from this. I am trying to convey my message better and I want to know if I succeded. Thank you! (:

Reviews

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This is an amazingly awesome write .. I love each and every line!

Great Job!

"You never really feel an emotion until you experience it.
Say your boyfriend cheats on you.
So your best friend helps you out, but she's never been cheated on." - -- That's so true, it's so easy for someone to say 'Get over it' ... But it's never that easy to actually get over a lost love

[Reaganwriter]

This is awesome. It seemed the mood sort of changed through the poem. This poem speaks for a lot of people.When i am having a bad day, ,my friends try to cheer me up, but my bad day is diffrent from everyone elses. I am in academically talented and i guess bright kids are supposed to have mood swings, anyway, once i tried to explain it to them but they didn't get it..............

[Vitamin A]

This is terrfic. It really makes me ponder everday life. The simplicity of the last stanza is perfect!

[Steve]

Hmm this is interesting, good job kayla! Here are my views for what they're worth:

Reading the first four stanzas I thought at first this was an impulsive reaction to something that happened, an angry fustration where the narrator may feel a kind of guilty betrayal. Strongly (maybe rashly) regarded as 'thoughtless lies' but really I think he/she just feels a bit helpless or hopeless in light of a certain situation.

I really like how the mood swings halfway through the poem, the question is asked 'Are our hopes and wishes thoughtless lies?' then after a bit of debate and questioning the answer is a definate response: 'That isn't thoughtless' like a coming of age, or maybe a step from adolescence into adulthood. I do kind of see it like a bit journey. That final line is anything but the insecure thread that weaves this poem, and its really good.

I think it comes to be realised that a shoulder to cry on, or a friendly ear really does makes a difference, regardless of any experience in the matter. One might not understand but the thought and well meaning are there.
Hmmm thats a bit of a ramble! I enjoyed reading it.