Fully surrendered

That feeling when love takes you to a new dimension

Who was I
Before you my savior
Taught me to love
Faithfulness, honesty

Before needed but unreached
Longed for but afraid
Of giving all
Yet gaining none

I came to unfold
You caught between walls
Yearned for you to explore
Beyond only the seen

Lured, challenged, grabbed you
Directly into the unknown
Offered you I
As I had surrendered

As role plays use stage
Props to add up
Earth's ground gave herself
To us lovers in need

She lend undiscovered field
For our play to be shown
She ordered stars to line up
For luck undisturbed

She asked Future
To stand beside
Fulfilling lovers' dreams
Depending on just luck

Author's Note

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Reviews

[idiotproof--1]

great poem. you're really good at describing love and creating images for the reader to see while reading one tip you could probably change some of the spacing I know people who write poetry and will separate sentences to exaggerate one part of them or two give different feeling to the two parts but some of yours just read as broken sentences other than that though this is a really nice poem.