The birth of thought

The birth of thought. A gift, is it?

A seed has been planted in the dirt,

old clothes about to get torn,

and when the belly blasted through the shirt,

another baby gets to be born.

Child, the human most people get jealous of.

A human also, most people fall in love.

When he gets hurt, he starts to cry,

still his smile will reach the sky.

Teen, when one child becomes gifted with thought.

He is surprised with what that gift has brought.

Filled with confusion, he starts to cry,

the young boy can only express this gift with a sigh.

When one teen becomes a young adult,

he has already found this gift to be good.

he knew this gift can get salty as salt.

but he knew by all means it's misunderstood.

Author's Note

I wish for you to criticize me as you please. I wish to get better at writing, for sometimes because of my impulsiveness I have to write.

Reviews

[Alejandra Marie]

I like where you are going with this. I very much enjoy the thought that is rooted behind the poem, however, there is some grammatical errors that made it a bit hard to read. This gift you are speaking of, I think, is very unique and individualized for every person, no one experiences the gift of thought the same. I also enjoyed the fact that you made the poem progress for each stage of life. That depending on which phase you are in this gift will encourage a different reaction within the person. It's kind of loose which I think is meant so the reader can interpret it however they like. I like it.

[Ady Boblil]

Thank you so very much! Of course I thought I had some grammatical errors, guess I'll work on that because English isn't my mother language. On my next poems I will try my best so that the readers can understand my message and so it won't be as hard to understand as you mentioned it was.

[Mirjana Ilic]

I like itttt, simple yet it really does show the progression of understanding, of our minds and thought. Though sometimes the mind of a child and an adult aren't very different, well done :)

[Ady Boblil]

Thank you very much! I'm happy you liked it :)

[Peach]

It has a beautiful message on the lives of growing children. I'm sure many can relate with this.

[Ady Boblil]

I'm happy you understood my message I was implying. Thank you so much!