The collection

It has suspense and no clue so guess guys!

      The darkness fell and she woke up. "Sit back down being!" Eva yelled. She looked up and was badly beaten. "You promised she wouldn't get hurt." Eli exclaimed. "I said she probably may not get hurt." Eva replied rolling up her sleeve. I kicked the chair in front of me and it fell with a BANG! Everyone looked at me. "Eva did say that Eli." i commented. "Thank you Mia." Eva said rapping the desk she was sitting at. "Can we please get on with it, i'm starving?" Andrea asked. "Sure, after the collection." Eva said. "The collection wasn't about beating it was about taking." Eli said pushing his chair in. "We're just doing it my way." Eva said kicking Eli playfully. "But our ancestors never did this way!" Eli yelled. The members of the counsel looked at Eli. "I'm just saying." Eli said quietly. "Sissy." Eva mumbled. "Shut up Eva." he yelled. "Can we finally get it over with. Like Andrea i'm hungry." i said. "She's right, the collection needs to be over with." Leah said getting in front of the man. "Go on then Leah." Eva said pushing the chair forward. Leah extracted the man's powers then we left. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Interesting. This seems like the start of a broader bit of rekoning. You could take more time editing, for instance when refering to yourself,( i ) should be ( I ). Little things make a difference when we write. I believe you have a good imagination. a good spell checker and grammar checker will help the readability. Keep writing, cuz you're good at it. But also work on punctuation, spelling, and grammar to make the product marketable.

[bablioe223]

Than you so much. I know i need to improve my writing and grammar and they say a ten year old couldn't make a good story. Thanks, and i will continue writing!

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

You are welcome.
I'm glad you want to be a writer. Learn all you can in English classes, That is where we get the foundation to build our writing platform upon.
Best wishes,
God Bless.