Trust Issues

Something I wrote in class.

i'd rather die of the thirst
than drown in the ocean
because you painted me a portait
but burned it to the ground
and i almost forgot,
that this is a desert
and there is no sea
that you are an artist
but spiteful at that.

Author's Note

I need poetry guidance in general; any advise welcomed. Poetry Appreciation class has taught me nothing with a permanent substitute teacher.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think this is a good start and certainly shows you have the potential to write ☺
I'm sure you'll learn plenty from here just like I did and still am learning! Keep at it ☺👍

[Parker101]

I think this is good even though I'm not really into poetry.

[Isabella Ivy]

I think you have great potential! I always thought a poett sees further or into a different sphere, and that I don't do that well enough. I think you have it! I like, 'I forgot that you are the artist' Just observe and read and write and write and write! Nice to meet you, I.I.

[Tony Jordan]

I hate those substitute teachers at times.
You'll learn plenty round here though ana grow
Welcome to WC !

[C.J.]

Thank you. ❤️

[.]

I find this poem VERY interesting to think about! The use of complex, corresponding words. The ONE thing I can't get past though is lack of punctuation and capitalization, but that's ALL. x3

[C.J.]

I honestly don't understand if there's a certain way to punctuate in poems.. So I just don't do it at all, oops.

[.]

Poetry punctuation is weird, and there are a few kinds, depending on layout. Commas are used after each line though. :p

[C.J.]

So would there technically be an incorrect way to punctuate? P.S. sorry I ask so many questions x'D