Waiting

I sat outside in the rain today
Right in front of my garden
And my beautiful flowers
Their colors looked almost as sad as me

My clothes were heavy and my body grew cold
But I stayed put
I didn't move

My eyes wandered the empty neighborhood
The empty parking space in front of my lawn
The same one you used to park in

I was slowly drowning
In all the silence the rain was giving me
But I stayed put
I didn't move

No cars drove by
And no people walked past
I was alone
Just me and the rain
And the silence

But I didn't move
I stayed put
Because I was hoping
That one day

You would come back

Reviews

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A wonderful piece of poetry. I enjoyed! Keep watching for your rose to bloom:)

[Cadel]

Isn't it crazy how absence can seem so powerful a force. And its only worsened by the fact that nothing but you seems to notice it.

[BlackPrince]

That is a unique poem expressing the hopefulness and faithfulness of love.
I like how you repeat the phrase 'I didn't move', expressing your patience in love.
I love the imagery of daily life, such as the neighbourhood, the car park, the rain,
to associate your loving longing and feeling.

WELL DONE

[adriana]

Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m glad you enjoyed it

[Lyrically Inclined]

Don’t waste your life waiting on someone who doesn’t want you. It’s not worth it. I know it hurts but if they came back it would never be the same. You would always wonder if they would leave again. Nice write though.

[adriana]

I’m not heartbroken, I just like writing sad stuff. Thank you