I could have loved you

written 2/10/03

I could have loved you

Park the car

In the core of the world

Burn my nightmares 

To inaudible scraps

Smoldering in your stomach

Spit on them

Sizzling things

I have your rib

You my finger

Place them in garbage pails

Keep them safe 

Start a new heart between us 

Pumping sulfur

Into a blackhole but we would be whole 

A whole heart 

Beating in blackness

Swallowed by a dead star

Light years away

From television and microwaves and magazines 

And condoms

Liquor would be extinct

Perfume would be lost

In ancient bedrooms

Next to expensive clothes 

Scattered on unwalked floors 

F**k the chores 

And flat tires and middle eastern wars

F**k the refrigerator 

Throw a pillow, a picture of you and me 

In that blackhole

All crushed to a distant spot 

Churning in shadows 

And dayless nights

Away from the intact world

Reviews

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Another dark poem. Another piece that tugs the heartstrings in a way that I greatly appreciate as a writer of somewhat dark poetry. Here's hoping you'll write something again soon, I'd love to see more like this.

[adornoscousin]

Thank you! I have been experiencing writer's block. I am working to get out of it!

[barleygirl]

Your poem depicts the ravages of life in stark unflinching detail, to a degree where it almost distracts from the overall message, since seeing an honest account of how ugly life can be makes most people squirm. This poem has that squirm factor in spades. But in general, I would guess this symbolizes how loving someone hopefully means that you can see him/her in all the squalor that living together especially reveals. I admire your way of telling a story using a series of powerful images -- the ultimate of SHOW instead of tell (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie