Silly machines- Human separation

A poem about crazy machines, which have lead to human separation.

That worthy creation;

who thought,

can be a cause for separation.

Not only of mind,

but of humankind.

 

I’ve seen and

I bore,

It can start a quarrel band

amidst happy lives

As sharp as I did with knives....

 

I suggest-

Don’t bring those crazy inventions

between your bests.

Let it be confined,

If you want to be peacefully dined.

 

 

Reviews

[Suditi]

Wow.
An honest, direct write.
It is sad really, that the new era machines have occupied such a huge place in our world..larger than we realize..and it is true..that though they are meant for better, faster communication many a times, they are the reasons which have created divides and distances.
Excellent theme. A very well written poem.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

yhis is very gud stuff...i like the direct speech that u used...keep writing

[Redrascalstrawberry]

It was good and the concept was clear :)
Just don't force the rhyme scheme, else is fine.

[Sarah G.]

This is a good poem and you have conveyed your point really well! :)

[Aehr]

nice write.. honest and true

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is easy to read and has a smooth flow. I like the rhymes and sentence structure. It seems to speak of the need for peace and our responsibility to contribute to that peace by being accountable for what we say. Words can cut like a knife and feed the flames of strife. Physically, I think it might be just a little easier for me to read with a slightly smaller font. Nicely done.

[Sethnicity]

I see the direction you are taking... maybe just drop the middle stanza. and don't force the rhyme scheme on the first line of the second stanza.

[MOON]

Use it not abuse it. Good write.