She belongs to fairytales . . .

Opening Paragraph

 

Once upon a time, there was a girl named Evey Evergold. Many looked upon her an thought of the fairytale ‘snow white’ with her ivory skin and hair as black as a raven’s feathers, others thought of ‘Cinderella’ with her horribly mean stepmother. Some even though of ‘Alice in Wonderland’ with her constantly confused expression. But when I, Jeremy Golds, look at Evey Evergold, I see a sad girl that seems lost and unnoticed amongst her five brothers, and a girl that wishes for a mother that genuinely loves her. It’s plainly obvious how I feel about Evey, and my friends don’t get why I don’t just talk to her, but the answer really is quite simple.

 

It is because she belongs to fairytales that I could never be.

 

Ending Paragraph

 

There once was a girl named Evey Evergold. Many looked upon her in her casket, and thought of the fairytale ‘Sleeping Beauty’ with her peaceful expression. Except this sleeping beauty, wont be waking up with the kiss of her prince, she didn’t go through the hard times in her life with three fat fairies, and she’ll never get her happy ending. But I, Jeremy Golds, will always see that smiling, fairytale princess amongst those white flowers. People say that it’s tragic that after finding love, she was to die, but the answer really is quite simple.

 

It is because she belongs to fairytales that this world could never be.

Author's Note

This is just the opening and ending paragraphs to a story i am writing. please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Kestrova]

I think those are exceptional ways to begin, and then end the story. I'm really intrigued as to what happened and hope to read more of this in the future. :)