A Shadow

In the gloom, you came,

making me cast a shadow,

and we called it love.

Reviews

[Carolynn]

This is an interesting short poem (Senryu I see below) I'm not familiar with that style of writing but I like how this one feels - like love has found you, however with it just being a shadow it somehow feels fleeting - like you could lose it... nicely done!

[stargirl23]

Thank you!

[dan]

Adi, Such a beautiful senryu. A lover arrives and lifts you out of the dark place you currently occupy. Very nice way of expressing hope and greeting love to lift the darkness. Very well done! take care...dan

[stargirl23]

Thank you!

[dan]

Adi, Your writing is very good, you are very talented. Please send me read requests; I'd like to read more of your work. Thank you!! take care...dan

[stargirl23]

Thank you so much; it really means a lot. Of course I'll send you read requests, and I'll continue to read your work!

[Solar]

A sombre side to a love/lover.

[stargirl23]

Much thanks!

[Cyndy Robinson]

Wondering about the double entendre here? Are you meaning it?

[stargirl23]

If you're referring to "you came," then no I did not intentionally mean it like that. I originally had it as "you arrived" but it did not fit with the senryu syllable scheme lol

[Cyndy Robinson]

Very well done done. I had to know because it means two different things otherwise. I love the shadow concept of two become one.

[stargirl23]

Thank you!