The Day the Giants Came

A commotion outside caused Squirrel to wake.

“What is this brouhaha?” said he. “Have you no concern for my sake?”

Eyes darting around, his anger was extinguished, for he saw Raccoon,

whose hair now resembled wisps of smoke curling up to the moon.

“Why Raccoon, what’s set your calm demeanor afire?”

“The Giants are back, I fear what they plan, O Sire.”

And that was when Squirrel saw what Raccoon recounted:

a group of them, wrapped in black bark, like no sane animal did.

“These Giants, they’re greedy, selfish, weird, insane,”

was Squirrel’s remark. “All others are helpless in their quest for gain.

And look, they wear collars round, like they put on those they own.

Without those gray sticks of theirs, we strike fear in them, a fact well known.”

“Still,” replied Raccoon. “This is no time for judgement.

They come to us now, and"oh, what is that scent?”

“’Tis that flickering warmth they use to kill ticks.

It is far more devastating than those gray sticks.”

“Come on Raccoon,” continued Squirrel. “We better hustle.

It would be fruitless to plead with those who disregard the Law of the Jungle.

One day, we’ll wield That with a just intent. Then,

we will drive them out and settle in their dens.”

Author's Note

I tried to write a poem with a rhyme scheme. Please tell me if anything sounds awkward!

Reviews

[Carolynn]

I really like your idea behind this one - man and his need to kill innocent animals and then ravage their land on top of it. It's a good message. It reads fairly well but I think "kill ticks" doesn't really work. Not sure if it's just me but I was thinking you could try the word tricks in their somehow?? Like "that flickering warmth with their powerful tricks, they wield far more devastation than those gray sticks" just a suggestion :) it's really good though!!

[stargirl23]

Thank you and I'll change it, I was unsure about those lines too