Her

9.14.16 - 2:20 PM

    you see, she's the kind of girl you read about in books, y'know? she's the quirky main character with a complicated past. she's the kind of main character that the second main character falls in love with, who also has a rough past. i admired everything about her. the way she carried herself was so enticing to me. she was so beautiful and pretty and gorgeous and dare i say, sexy. now when i say sexy i don't mean sexy sexy, but like, sexy. i enjoyed hearing her talk, it could be about how she wanted to kill me, and i would still love it. her voice was enthralling, and her mindset was beyond anything i could comprehend yet i loved it. she's very smart, very. she's a nice person, cares a lot about people. she's the type of girl you fall in love with and never fall out of love with.

Reviews

[JordanBaker]

I love how you describe the woman, you also used three synonymous adjectives in one line, 'beautiful, pretty and gorgeous' i know they have a bit of differences in their meaning but still, synonymous. But it works just fine if you meant to do that. If you meant the second main character to appear very taken with her because that's how it looks like, he (let me assume that the persona in the poem is a he) is a masochistic by saying if she kills him, he would love it. The whole things emanates obsessive love to me. It would be interesting to use this theme in a short story or novel. Hey, what do you think so?

[Ardra]

i could be about how she wanted to kill me, and i would still love it..u miss spelled it.. as I.... Very interesting lady ...I can say you are head over heels in love with her :) it's only love that drives us crazy and makes us do things we wouldn't do in normal state of mind :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem.
"she's the type of girl you fall in love with and never fall out of love with."
You create interesting character and I liked how you described her. The above lines. Amazing. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote