Confessions of Fire

In that moment,
My soul burned
What was born
From pleasure
Had to die in guilt
In that moment
I was caught up
Denying
My betrayal
Now I confess
To this fire
My eyes,
A sea of blood
Ready
For the consequence

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this was very haunting but in a down to earth way. i think we've all done something we later regretted. and karma gets us all in the end. biting work. sharply written, it slices deep.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Oh, this could be the echo of so many poor choices I've made in my own life, moments of temptation remembered with painful regret and lived out in personal disappointment. Great poem and I enjoyed the read despite the painful recollections it stirred. But people can and do change and we all must grow and learn for ourselves. It's funny that every generation tries to warn the next but the warnings fall mostly on deaf ears. When I was a teen I thought my parents were just boring old people and I didn't have time to listen to their old fashioned ideas. Now I'm old and I know my kids and grandkids would feel the same about my advice. But I think each generation just has to learn the ropes of life for themselves. Great write. F.

[Daz]

Thanks for the review.

[Arundass TP]

Though shot nicely written poem. Loved it

[Daz]

Thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

What was born
from pleasure
had to die in guilt

That is so very powerfully expressed. A betrayal can certainly lead to guilt. Confessing that guilt would cause a bonfire of magnitude. You say so much here in this brevity. Thank you for sharing.

[Daz]

I had to laugh at 'bonfire of magnitude'... You get the idea. And yes, guilt is exhausting. Thanks for this lovely review Chris :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome. Pleased you could laugh at bonfire of magnitude:) I built one of those for my first husband. He was lucky he didn’t end up as a guy fawkes effigy :)

[Daz]

LoL!!! I hear you.

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

In one fell swoop!
You executed the scene of the fall,
regret and retribution.
Daz!
You are a remarkable writer!

[Daz]

Thank you Titilayo. Beautiful name?
Se yoruba ni e?

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

Be ni.Yoruba in mi.

[Daz]

Inu mi dun la ti ri e

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

E se gan ni.

[Pryde Foltz]

Infidelity is a hard one. You capture both its allure and its consequence masterfully.

[Daz]

Thank you, Pryde Foltz.

[John the Baptist]

"What was born from pleasure/ Had to die in guilt." There is a suggestion of sex in this. The story behind it would be interesting.

[Daz]

Thanks for the review.