I feel you

I feel you near
In every instance
In a wild flower,
Beautiful

Or a soaring bird
Spiritual

The warmth of sun
or the cool breeze
against my skin
So physical

Even when I forget,
the truth remains.
Your love
will always be here

Reviews

[H L Rose]

Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.

Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.

I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.

I enjoyed reading this!

[Daz]

Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be three full stops. I put the ellipsis where it is because I wanted to create a sort of pause there. And then the last two lines should have a continuous flow to it. I like that you pointed that out though, it's made me look at the poem in a new way.

[H L Rose]

Of course! I’m glad!

[ochechi]

Hi nice work here

[Donna]

Its a beautiful thing! Nicely written!

[Daz]

Thank you Donna

[Sami Khalil]

This is gorgeous indeed. Very powerful and effective.

[Daz]

Thanks Sami. I kinda like the way it turned out.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...

[Loving Me5]

Beautiful poem it was very well written.

[Daz]

Thanks... I appreciate that

[Kelly Scheppers]

Sometimes a memory takes residence in our heart. I loved how you expressed that with so little!

[Daz]

Thanks Kelly

[Papaya]

there are always reminders everywhere, and if you find that you miss a few then you look inwardly to know what is true. I enjoyed this

[Daz]

Thanks. I saw this flower today, took a pic and got inspired. Glad you enjoyed. I also enjoyed reading your review.

[Papaya]

You're welcome :)