I feel you

I feel you near
In every instance
In a wild flower,
Beautiful

Or a soaring bird
Spiritual

The warmth of sun
or the cool breeze
against my skin
So physical

Even when I forget,
The truth remains
That your love
Will always be there

Reviews

[H L Rose]

Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.

Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.

I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.

I enjoyed reading this!

[Daz]

Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be three full stops. I put the ellipsis where it is because I wanted to create a sort of pause there. And then the last two lines should have a continuous flow to it. I like that you pointed that out though, it's made me look at the poem in a new way.

[H L Rose]

Of course! I’m glad!

[ochechi]

Hi nice work here

[Chris Shaw]

This beautiful poem, so simply stated goes right to the core of the reader. The presence of a loved one, always closely felt, even if separated by distance. The simplicity of the wording, makes it a special poem in my opinion. Well done Jodash.

Chris

[Papaya]

I can't believe I reviewed this 6 years ago. Wow. 🙂
Still a beautiful poem.

[mou]

It is a lovely poem. Someone's presence is felt in the gentle gifts of nature such as 'wild flower', 'soaring bird' 'cool breeze' or 'warmth of sun'. You've written it beautifully, dear poet.
- mou

[Daz]

Thank you mou for the encouragement 🙂

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Some love will remain forever for true love never dies- wonderful words🌹

[Daz]

Hi! Thanks for the double review ;) it's a pleasure to read them. Feel free to check out some of my other stuff if you like. I've been reading your work as well... Sorry I haven't reviewed. I'm not really much of a reviewer. But I like your writing style and most of your themes are thought provoking. I appreciate that. Have a great weekend.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure - good weekend to u as well🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful- when you feel two as one- wonderful words of love🌹

[Babbette Francis]

Sounds like one of many times I could see my purpose in a wild flower or feel the life around me. The very touch of the still air around me laid on skin like the feel of satin blowing in a soft breeze. I felt him inside and out and when I'd forget he'd call my name. In these times I also felt mostly loved mainly because I may have stepped away long enough to forget but his love wouldn't allow me to go long enough to forget his voice or far enough to not be able hear it. I very Spiritual experience. You're blessed to see his love in the way that you do. Thank you

[Daz]

Thank you for this wonderful review Babbette

[AllenS]

Such personal realizations about relationship. Yes there is an abiding presence, a near and dearness about a true love that simply exists. There are moments one awakes to the presence of the other while contemplating natural beauty or reflecting in shere awe. Thanks for opening me to these moments.

[Daz]

Very much appreciate and enjoyed reading your review. It was a special feeling that came over me from a walk that afternoon I wrote this.

[Donna]

Its a beautiful thing! Nicely written!

[Daz]

Thank you Donna