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A little girl in pearls

Ganders in on mothers world

Wondring how it was

Before her life became unfurled

 

When these pearls were on your neck

Was it hard to do your best

Knowing life as it seemed

Was but your mothers dream

 

To the world, was your love real

Though you had taken the wheel

And swung so far the other way

Love had lost it's final days

 

When you were me was it wrong

To sing a cheerful song

When life lost it's melody

Of any song that bloomed in glee

 

When your life was young and heart was frail

Did you stick true to the fairy tale

I only inquire on this, you see

Fore it has not been so fortunate for me

 

I'll wear your pearls on down the isle

If only to see my mother smile

But sorrow fills your longing face

As your child brings you a joyous disgrace

 

I am happy, can't you see

Your tender love is all I need

To meet me along but half way

And promise me it's there to stay

 

I know, to you, it must seem

This is not the dream you dreamed

Your baby boy goes down the isle

Behind a veil he bares a smile

 

My dear mother, don't you know

Within me your spirit glows

So to me it has to seem

My truest joy would be your dream

 

Be it in curled, long or shiney hair

Before the neckline where I wear

Mothers tiny pearls lined of gold

Her dearest treasure, of which I hold

 

Mother, please, come to me,

This is the way I choose to be

My love and heart have long set sail

There lies the truest, happy, fairy tale

 

4/1/2008

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

Now this is what I was talking about. It's loaded with those poetics. You do a great job of alluding to your mother at a young age and comparing her to you (that is if you indeed are the speaker of the poem). I've only read three of your pieces, but this is easily the best.

Watch out for those absent apostrophes...

"Was but your MOTHER'S dream"
"MOTHER'S tiny pearls lined of gold"

Just a couple of examples. Not a huge deal, but you'll probably want to get the grammar stuff right.

-Travis

[Aries]

Oh Wow...I like this one. As Frances, I was surprised at the twist, never expecting the Son....very intense, a lot of feeling in this one. The imagery was nice also~

Awesome Write~

[L.G. Knight]

P.S. this is DEFFINATLY HOT!

[L.G. Knight]

Wow.... Just wow!

Omg I like this... Your poems are so intence and this one had a little twist I was not expecting the character to actually be a boy... Nice Write!

~Frances~