My Favorite Part

My Favorite Part

 

My favorite part was holding you

The touch, the kiss, the follow through

My favorite part was feeling safe

Not scared, just lost, in your embrace

My Favorite part was feeling alive

From the the fire I saw burn deep in your eyes

My favorite part was in the surprise

Of your power, and strength conducting the ride

 

My favorite part was also the way

You boasted at being the savior of my day

My favorite part was in your arms

Rushed with bewilderment of your charms

The way you knew your role and mine

How you made your descend so extra devine

The way you could feel your spirit in mine

The way you could see how souls are entwined

 

My favorite part was having to fight

Pulling strentgh from the depths of my might

Knowing there will be an "end of the night"

Knowing that something just didn't seem right

Suspecting the flaw in our little affair

Dismissing those thoughts, for then you were there

A vibrant one, emerging from two

Fulfilling the needs we're so loyal to

 

My favorite part was when I cried

Without hesitation, you put passion aside

You spoiled  me with care and undying grace

Attempting to kindly give me my space

 

I think you should know there was more there

More than your power stealing my care

I think you should know, In case you could not see

I needed you there, I needed you with me

I think you should know, though truly great

The best was not how well our bodies could relate

It was how you eased my pain and read my mind

How I did so for you at the same time

How you made me feel and made me care

When minutes ago you were not there

But you came through just in time

We knew, without saying, it was fates design

 

You were mine and I was yours

Hearts of two sharing love of four

Suddenly, the clock struck to reveal true fate

You were not in nirvana, but simply "running late"

 

When you agreed it was not fates plan

I had to boldly let go of your hand

Let go of your heart, let go of your soul

Let go of you and regain control

 

When you agreed it was not fate

With fractured souls, we were on our separate ways

Letting go of our loves deepest demands

I guess your favorite part was the one night stand

 

3/29/2008

Reviews

[woodennymph]

now i can truly conclude that we just really click. again, like in your previous poem, i was able to relate, really relate to this. it is very beautiful, very vulnerable and very sincere. i could feel all the love and the hurt, the comfort and the fear, the joy and the sadness at every turn. this poem plucked my heartstrings throughout. i was thinking of one guy the entire time and i just really felt everything. this mirrors how i feel too and it is just so surreal...thanks though, for making these kinds of poems. poems that enable me to see that i am not alone and things would be ok. another amazing work!

[alternative_be]

True love, still betrayed in such a way that breaking up becomes inevitable... Yet the love was not a lesser love or less beautiful, but soft and breakable, just as the language in your poem.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is deep in my opinion and so so sad.. i like the way you use the words .' my favorite part' .. and tell us ...
This one pulls at my heart and makes me feel the love this person felt, feels for this one with whom she had to let go of his hand ..

Chloe
xoxo

[the_real_me]

that sounds like my best friend always with another guy. she was even with a married guy

[Jon]

Good writing!

I really like the way you build the scene here - demonstrating some really strong and passionate views, culminating in the harsh reality of how it was - and the fact that you had to do the hardest of things.

"When you agreed it was not fates plan

I had to boldly let go of your hand

Let go of your heart, let go of your soul

Let go of you and regain control"

[Aries]

Well...after Frances....there is nothing left to say..

I agree with her review totally...

Awesome Writing!!

[L.G. Knight]

OMG that Was So Freaking Amazing! I just had to say "WOW" at the end! and to think just a couple days ago you said you had never had a good break up story that sounded like one to me! even if it was a one night stand it was still a relationship that ended and that poem could have easily taken first place! Awesome Write Babe!

"When you agreed it was not fate

With fractured souls, we were on our separate ways

Letting go of our loves deepest demands

I guess your favorite part was the one night stand"

Awesome finish!

~Frances~