The original sin

so there i was: asleep in my bed, when suddenly..... i woke up with this in my head! lol

so let bygones be bygones

and Wants be the needs
with two and threes and
Birds and leaves,
withins, withouts
(not to mention what
Love forgot)
As i bow my head,
tip my hat and
bid thee "adieu!"
with the smile you
know so well
i dissappear within the
words of mine own

Author's Note

ignore the grammar stuff, i made it this way on purpose

Reviews

[aventurera; yessica]

I heard your whisper and I liked it simply because I didnt comprehend.

[Jacqueline]

I love the "adieu!"
That is just so....Adam
This poem is short, sweet and to the point.
Not to mention your connection of seemingly random thoughts.
It really shows how the human mind works and thinks and how the diversity of those thoughts should be viewed-as something different but good.
I honestly don't think this is meant to delve into deep religious perspectives but to open and broaden the mind of people who are stuck in the narrow hall of their own perspective.

It's awesome.

[Onatah]

Having the knowledge of the distinction between your will and God's will is the knowledge of Good and evil. Acting on your own will with this knowledge, THAT is original sin!

[Jeff Loquist]

Ah, and like it should be it leaves the question of what the original sin is open to interpretation.