shadow

i'm a forgettable shadow- i've always been. 

sneaking into the lives of people, only to have them blow me out like a candle, and forget about it. i am the smoke that lingers- never forgetting the flame.

the smoke that looks back, still caring.

the smoke that wishes things could be the same.

the smoke caused by the person who got rid of the flame.

just a wisp that is so trivial, no one would care if it was there or not.

sometimes

i wish

people actually could care

and remember

the smoke.

Reviews

[Jesse Lancaster]

The ending is magnificent. I'm absolutely in love the imagery. Cutting off "I am" in the second line really emphasizes the smoke, and there's a lot to see just in the formatting of this poem. Like I said before, the ending really seals the deal. It wraps up the poem, all the while presenting the one wish of the persona in its rawest form: to be remembered. Great job, giiiiiirl.

[misscb]

This was great... So creative... Well done!!!