Generosity

Its a poem which reflects the first moment a person find love and have a relationship with the lover .

First came your charm

which  brought a lot of happiness

when I was in my corner

Saved by your generosity

I want to feel natural when

you get closer

I feel safe when you are near 

Protected I am when you give me a powerful hug

Joy is what your presence brings me

Acucena G.

Author's Note

I hope you read and give your opinion

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

I myself have not found someone with whom this feeling sticks, but I do understand it. I must say that I enjoyed how you added the picture at the very beginning, and it was quite a good choice at that. What I must say, though, is I feel like this isn't a finished poem. It seems as if it stops right in the middle of a thought, and because of that I urge you to expand upon the poem. A nice go overall, though. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the way you describe the birth of love and hope. Real love should be when we are not afraid to share and give all parts of us. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Acucena G.]

Thank you very much for reading and complimenting my poem.

[David Wesley]

This is a nice and comforting piece. A mutual respect, simple images to convey, very clear writing. Cool.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you very much, I am glad you liked the poem

[Syble]

Short, sweet and to the point! :)

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Syble

[Syble]

You're welcome!

[Jack...]

Beautiful, simply filled with love.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Jack

[Tate Morgan]

Life is not meant to go through alone.And hence we all strive for that one love that makes us whole.I dont know I think we can be happy with many others Not that there is but one. However it only takes one to build a life with

[Acucena G.]

Yes, you are right

[Frieda P]

This is like a warm hug on the page, feeling secure is such a delightful feeling, and you've given us that with this read. Nice one.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you very much Frieda

[Imara]

I love how you put a spin to the word generosity, no so much as giving something physical that one can hold but the love, the security, the joy.
"Protected I am when gain a powerful hug from you" here there is bad grammar there should be a word in-between gain, and a but that's your choice.
Over all great job expressing those new wants and expectations that come with going into a new relationship. All that a woman or man wants when he or she finds a new lover. I really liked it :)

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Imara

[Kristin Lee]

I love the simplicity of this poem. Such natural human elements in your chosen words. And they hold a certain charming allure that makes this feel so warm and real.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you for supporting me

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great idea...you went somewhere with this that I think many people can relate to. First there is the charm, and then there is the rest. People don't always stay the way that they were when we first met them...unfortunately.

On a poetic style and technical note...you have some tense issues: "I wanted" and then "I feel" instead of "felt". Just a few little things that need ironing out, but overall, nicely done.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you very much Sarah