Windows of Perfection

The poem is about a teenager whom is in love, it describes what goes on in a mind of this perfection and how the person feels about the beloved.

                                                      

 

When I am with you, everything is ideal !

When you are far away, my windows of perfection break.

You are my heaven and my song,

With you I can fight the evils  that surround our world,

No negligence, no suffering,

With you  my world is strong and perfect.

Acucena G.

Reviews

[RobbedByGreed]

Nice poem :) The happiness seeps through your words and I can feel the smile showing through.

Good job!


---RbG

[Acucena G.]

Thank you for reading RBG

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful photo and hopeful poem. I like the feel of happiness in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Acucena G.]

Thank you for reading Cayote

[Chris]

Nice thoughts...

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Chris

[Baby Ricochet]

Cute little poem. Good Job.

[Acucena G.]

thank u for reading

[esperanza]

I like nice poem .

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Esperanza

[esperanza]

Your welcome .

[Riley Bray]

I like the poem aside from the repitition of the word perfect; Maybe use a synonym? Great poem!

[Acucena G.]

I will work on that , Thank u once again

[Riley Bray]

No problem

[DrD]

I never had broken windows in love except for that time when she kicked them in trying to get at me.

[Acucena G.]

hahahahah, at least she was trying to do a good thing for her. I like the story I think I am going to write somthing about that .

[KeeD]

This is true.. when I was 17 I felt that way.. I felt that no matter how strong a breeze as long as I had her to cuddle with nothing could close the windows of my heart. Then I grew up.. and met the storm.

[Acucena G.]

hahahah, then u see how things work when the windows r broken , lol , thanks for commenting @Keegan D' Souza , by the way do u speak portuguese or spanish ?

[KeeD]

Haha no worries it was my pleasure to read your work and no unfortunately I don't. Beautiful languages though.

[Acucena G.]

yes they are and fortunately I speak one of them , lol , I can teach u I u want

[Acucena G.]

Thank you Frieda P

[Frieda P]

We are truly irrational when we're in love, but it's a time when we also see the best of who we are, and the best of our intended affections...nicely pen'd.

[Acucena G.]

Is what love does, is also beacause of love that we are writting , isnt it?

[Frieda P]

Hmm, not always...I know for myself anyway, perhaps you do.

[Acucena G.]

hahhh no I don't , kkk love likes to distruct us sometimes lol