Windows of Perfection

Windows of Perfection

A Poem by Acucena G.
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The poem is about a teenager whom is in love, it describes what goes on in a mind of this perfection and how the person feels about the beloved.

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When I am with you, everything is ideal !

When you are far away, my windows of perfection break.

You are my heaven and my song,

With you I can fight the evils  that surround our world,

No negligence, no suffering,

With you  my world is strong and perfect.
Acucena G.

© 2013 Acucena G.


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Nice poem :) The happiness seeps through your words and I can feel the smile showing through.

Good job!


---RbG

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading RBG
A beautiful photo and hopeful poem. I like the feel of happiness in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Cayote
Nice thoughts...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

Thank you Chris
Cute little poem. Good Job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

thank u for reading
I like nice poem .

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

Thank you Esperanza
esperanza

11 Years Ago

Your welcome .
I like the poem aside from the repitition of the word perfect; Maybe use a synonym? Great poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

I will work on that , Thank u once again
Riley Bray

11 Years Ago

No problem
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I never had broken windows in love except for that time when she kicked them in trying to get at me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

hahahahah, at least she was trying to do a good thing for her. I like the story I think I am going t.. read more
This is true.. when I was 17 I felt that way.. I felt that no matter how strong a breeze as long as I had her to cuddle with nothing could close the windows of my heart. Then I grew up.. and met the storm.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

hahahah, then u see how things work when the windows r broken , lol , thanks for commenting @Keegan .. read more
KeeD

11 Years Ago

Haha no worries it was my pleasure to read your work and no unfortunately I don't. Beautiful languag.. read more
Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

yes they are and fortunately I speak one of them , lol , I can teach u I u want
Thank you Frieda P

Posted 11 Years Ago


We are truly irrational when we're in love, but it's a time when we also see the best of who we are, and the best of our intended affections...nicely pen'd.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

Is what love does, is also beacause of love that we are writting , isnt it?
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Hmm, not always...I know for myself anyway, perhaps you do.
Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

hahhh no I don't , kkk love likes to distruct us sometimes lol

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Acucena G.
Acucena G.

Chimoio, centre, Mozambique



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