Whispering

Its a poem about the transition to a young adult love, where young adults find out that everything that they thought they know seems like are unkown to them, is where they redefine the meaning of life

                                                                     

 

Sometimes you look at yourself  and find out that time has gone,

and your friends are all grownups

It Is the time that you realize things which never meant  anything  to you,

when  the time comes  it seems like all the charges have been  left for you.

when I was younger  everything I used think was  about love,

what is passion and, how can we distinguish both sentiments

without getting confused, why people can’t live without

Someone they love

But now, all I think about  is how to get rid of these insignificant sentiments,

and I have been struggling  with myself  to not give my heart  and strength  to whom I love,

all I want is to be secure on the relationship I am in ,

just want to feel  loved and desired.

 When the time comes I need to know that life is a trick, and that

We do not have to be its target.

 Acucena G.

Author's Note

I hope you like it, feel free to review and give me notes.

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

Very true and easily relatable poem, thiugh not a rare topic. (Not that it matters due to the way you added your own style to it). The third line you wrote, "it Is..." The it should be capitalized and the is lowercased. On the fifth line you wote use while it should be used. There are a few other spelling or grammar mistakes scattered in this poem, so I ask that you reread. Overall nice poeem Acucena. :)

[Acucena G.]

Thank you very much , hhaahah I have this thing that after writting I don't have the courage to read, but I am following ur advice, I am going to reread the poem and make it right. Best wishes Riley Bray

[Riley Bray]

Haha stay strong! Same to you. ;)

[Acucena G.]

kkk I will

[Riley Bray]

Might want to delete one of those k's...hehe.........

[Acucena G.]

;ol

[Vikrantsingh]

Good Work.
Keep writing more.

Cheers!
Vikrantsingh.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you for visiting

[Vikrantsingh]

You're Welcome :)

[Albert Otshudi Longe]

I never knew you were such a beautiful writer, this is amazing and keep it up. I feel like falling in love with your poems!

[Acucena G.]

wow, I didn't you were here kkk, thanks for supporting me , you are very good friend .

[David Wesley]

Your poem got me thinking - maybe the thoughts when we are younger are understanding love, and when we get older we have to give those thoughts to another to feel love. Life is just a construct to help us cope, but two people who share love are intimate and free of obstruction. Your poem is honest, I noted it is two parts.

[Acucena G.]

I think that the best part is when you share love i a mature way , thanks for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a constant teacher. Our view on life, love and goals will change many times. I begin my life over four times. I tossed the old me away and learn to try to be better. I tell the young folks. Have fun, test life and keep learning. Hard to be a target when you cannot be stopped. Thank you for sharing your thoughts in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Acucena G.]

Yes we are always defining ourselves, thanks for reading and commenting , One love

[Baby Ricochet]

I think it's lovely, and true

[Acucena G.]

Thanks Baby Ricochet

[Frieda P]

Ah all the intricacies of love within our lives...you've given it a new life here, yes, tricky, and we hardly ever figure it out either. Well said, I like this one Acucena.

[Acucena G.]

Thank you so much Frida P

[Frieda P]

My pleasure. :-)

[Imara]

I liked your opening lines the best. "When the time comes seems like all the changes have been left for you" I love this line but there is also an error with it between comes and seems there should be "it" or it should be a new line. Of course seeing as this is poetry you don't have to change it. Great job relating it back to something personal with you and the insecurities that you have personally. You started broad and slowly got specific. Great job :)

[Acucena G.]

Thank you so much Imara , its was really helpfull , I will work it out, best wishes

[esperanza]

I like it,its a awesome poem .

[Acucena G.]

Thaks for reading and liking Esperanza

[esperanza]

Welcome

[Jack...]

In some ways I think life just may be a trick...but love still feels good if it is. Very nice.

[Acucena G.]

you reviews mean a lot to me , so , thank you for reading and reviewing Jack .