Colors of You

Colors of You

 

Blue.

Blue like a glacier.

A strong, blue glacier

atop the green, arctic waters.

Green.

Green like the plaid shirt

that I wear to bed because

it smells like you,

when I’m alone

under my purple blanket.

Purple.

Purple like the sound

of your laugh, like

the jump in my heart

when your pink lips smile.

Pink.

Pink like the bright,

flushed color that rises

in your cheeks

beneath your brown freckles

after a passionate kiss.

Brown.

Brown like the earth

we’ve made friends with.

Like my eyes that you love,

though I’ll never know why.

Brown like the door to here

with its silver handle.

Silver.

Silver like the flecks in your eyes,

the sparks of something more.

Silver like an angel.

Like your angel

from before we met over

a pile of red apples.

Red.

Red like our first hello.

Red like bright potential,

like a neon orange light,

A sign.

Orange.

Orange like the jacket.

Yours, but you gave it to me.

With its hood and white

drawstrings.                               

White.

White like the snow that

fell of the gray sidewalks

as we hurried

down Euclid Avenue

shivering in each other’s arms.

Gray.

Gray like the world when the rain falls.

Like the clouds and the sky when we

run outside to embrace the

puddles, and encourage the weak

yellow sun to be strong.

Yellow.

Yellow like the skittles

you save for me.

Like your grandmother’s lemon squares

in the clear glass pan at Easter

That made you grin

in simple joy.

All this, from your eyes.

Reviews

[ReversingEvolution4TheB..]

Welcome to WritersCafe, Anna! I want to be the first to review this, and fortunately it's a good review! I hope you write more because I really enjoyed reading this. So here is my official review...

The GOOD: I liked the way you were able to bring every color you were writing about into the poem by simply referencing them in the previous bout. I see a definite flow and can feel the fluidity as I read it aloud. I like the way you've brought your emotions forward along with nature, because really, nature is all there is. I'm seeing great potential in you, and like I said earlier... I hope you write more and post a lot.

The BAD: You used a lot of repetition, too much in my opinion. Some colors have more repetition than others which created an inharmonious imbalance.

Overall, I'm going to give you a 99/100 because of how well-written this piece of work is, and I rarely will give a full 100 for a first post unless it strikes me as something absolutely perfect. I expect nothing more than a 99 on my own works, therefore admitting my faults. Keep up the good work and I'm sure you'll get many 100's, even some from me =)

Feel free to review some of my poetry as well, I'd be more than happy to read your suggestions. It only helps me in my writing, and I've found my reviews to be quite helpful.

Write on!