Clocks
A Poem by Amelia Pagliaro
Do you hear that? Tick. Tick. It's inside of me. It's inside of you. Tick. Tick. It's muffling my thoughts. And your words seem much less clear. I'm scared. There is a clock inside of me. It's warning me. A constant reminder. That we are temporary. We are all just clocks sitting on shelves. Beating to keep the time. ... Tick.
© 2014 Amelia Pagliaro
Author's Note
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Any feedback would be great! Positive or negative, it's all helpful. Thanks!
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Poetry, like your poem,"Clocks." has the ability to reduce the larger condition - say mortaity- to the smaller condition by example -say clocks. The reader can easily infer the Atlantic from the droplets of water the poem holds out. The treatment is good metphor that could just as easily have been standard cliche handled with less skill.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Roland Bathes said (in S/Z) that some buddhists have the ability to see the landscape inside a bean,.. read moreRoland Bathes said (in S/Z) that some buddhists have the ability to see the landscape inside a bean, and we attempt to see the entire realm of literature in one form. I think this coincides with your idea; the poem narrows existence into a form of a clock, to signify some referential, human existence. I like it. Good review, by the way.
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tick tock time is ticking by :) yes we are temporary :) lovely piece enriched with reality :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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Very interesting.
I would take a slightly odd perspective.
Clocks are a representation of time. They simply signify a system of time measurement. They are surface...a representation. To me, this poem shows how superficial and "exterior" our existence is, for lack of a better term. We are all decaying "outsides" and our language is all "outside" and even this review is "outside." Again, to me, this poem is really really interesting because it brings up a contradiction that our souls are "forever" while our existence is temporary. Just like a clock, our language and thought is some exterior signifying an interior (time, soul) which we believe to be immortal.
Sorry for that. Great poem!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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Poetry, like your poem,"Clocks." has the ability to reduce the larger condition - say mortaity- to the smaller condition by example -say clocks. The reader can easily infer the Atlantic from the droplets of water the poem holds out. The treatment is good metphor that could just as easily have been standard cliche handled with less skill.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Roland Bathes said (in S/Z) that some buddhists have the ability to see the landscape inside a bean,.. read moreRoland Bathes said (in S/Z) that some buddhists have the ability to see the landscape inside a bean, and we attempt to see the entire realm of literature in one form. I think this coincides with your idea; the poem narrows existence into a form of a clock, to signify some referential, human existence. I like it. Good review, by the way.
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Amelia Pagliaro San Francisco, CA
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"But what's crazy and what's sane when everything is possible and yet nothing ever happens?"
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