snowfall

i dream of whats beyond these four walls
as slowly the snow falls
dream while my life continues to crawl
 as slowly the snow falls
 
when did my life become about dreams i wonder
as slowly the snow falls
when did my time become valuable plunder
 as slowly the snow falls

in my thoughts i am frozen in time
as slowly the snow falls
never able to forget my crime
as slowly the snow falls

i let u leave my side
as slowly the snow falls
all because i lied
as slowly the snow falls

now im stuck repeating the same lines
as slowly the snow falls
pretending that im fine
as slowly the snow falls

as slowly the snow falls
as slowly the snow falls
as slowly the snow falls
as slowly the snow falls....
 

Reviews

[Jills]

This is one of my favorite poems that you have written. There's just this... quality about it i guess.

Like, it's almost sad in a way. Like, the person is thinking about all these things, going on day by day, all in a repetitive motion. They say that they're fine, when it's easy to tell that they're not.

Nice work

[Theresa]

What I get from this and I could be wrong is that when it snows you are trapped inside with no where to go and forced to face yourself. I really enjoyed it and I think it flows well. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.