For you.

Okay,

So I’ve guessed

That you don’t like me the way I am

But that’s fine,

I’m willing to change

For you.

 

But tell me,

Is it my hair?

My weight?

My height?

My laugh?

My smile?

 

I’d change all of these,

For you.

 

I’ve tried to forget you,

But it didn’t work.

 

I need somebody, anybody you.

I want someone you to love me.

 

It’s not much to ask.

 

Please.

Reviews

[Sherwette]

I love the word strikes on someone and anybody :)

[LittleGuitar94]

im loving the strike-outs zo! Great effect!

[Forgotten]

Wow ive never seen the cancelling out words technique before, i feel this poem has not only shown power, but has also taught me something as well, It is an emotional peice =D

[D S Rollins]

I love the way you did the I need -- -- you. I LOVE that kind of stuff. The last word made me go 'Aww!' because I actually felt the desperation of wanting to change for this person. But, really this person should love you for you..

[Dizzy]

I like the poem and the way its written but I do believe that the person loves you the most would be the person who wouldnt change a thing about you.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow! now that's love it can't get any better. nice work.

[Cassidy Mask]

It's funny because i never knew you wrote.. but this is fab ;) love the crossings out and the way it finishes on a single word. great structure xx

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Aww, mortal, this is very bittersweet, and I must say that I love this, particularly the list of questions and the way you've set up the poem in general. A wonderful little bit of work here, I must say that I am impressed, good work mortal~

[EMP]

awww, zoe this is so good! i like your structure, how you put your thoughts into words (when you cross things out etc) and the poetic techniques like enjambements etc. ARGH it's just really good! and i like how you start so casually, 'okay' is really powerful in this :') *heart*