Objective...

Right about today, I lost my way,

The things I say

Have gone astray,

I linger in thoughts of where I was,

Chosen sleuth for a wrong cause,

 

As I slide through time, for plays of crime,

Past’s malicious grin,

Straight out of a comic scene,

2.7 cm wide, 4.7 cm long, and what’s the strain,

Throbs till death with liquid pain,

 

Details and equations, showcases and relationships,

Parts of the prescribed course,

Mostly paid and packed in remorse,

To the fact that life given and taken for free,

Rejuvenated by the kiss of poetry,

 

Obsessed with the unknown, lonely motor’s groan,

In the laboratory of fate, all the wrong reasons sown,

Even with all the artificial help,

I’d like to feel myself,

Through the reagents that erodes me,

And the world inundated in an engine’s cacophony,

 

Research turned smudged the line between black and white,

For the things I wish were still hidden,

We shouldn’t have known and survived without the guilt,

The science of perfect pictures disclosed,

In reveries, sedated and heavily dosed,

 

And technically, I had to live,

As the king of the lost cause,

A blind in the dark,

What is the loss?

Seemed somewhere around yesterday,

That I lost my way...

Reviews

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. ha ha ! ... spectacular stuff, abhas ... you don't need to change anything, imho ... i like that you write far more spontaneously than earlier and it would be disastrous if you got into concocting or modifications that are totally not needed ... most of the world around seems to think poetry lies in structures and multiple edits ... but it doesn't ... it's about the thought ... and what a thought this is ... i am amazed ... and before last evening ... i would've been simply speechless after reading this ... but, no ... i shall email you something soon ... yet, this is more important than that ... yes, you shall be the monarch of the lost cause ... and after that ... the lost cause won't remain a lost cause ... that's how it goes ... truly ... it does ... if you don't give up on the universe ... the universe doesn't dare give up on you ... :) ... shotti !!! ... :D ...

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. You open the door to many questions. Easy to get lost and not know what path to be on. I believe all of us must stop. Figure out what we really want and need. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Khaaki]

wonderfully written... its difficult to pen your thoughts spontaneously but u have done very well here. i agree with serah... very well done...

[Sydney Evans]

Great write (:
I really enjoyed reading this.

[Alicante lullaby]

i dunno but i think this sort of describes the convulations of thoughts,directionlessness amuses you..
king of lost cause...wow,wow,wow.

[Ed Hart]

it could be indigestion, take two aspirin and see what comes from your pen in the morning

[Max Payne]

Ahh...you are an amazing thought yourself..letting aside your poetry for a while...Its not like fate can actually engineer some magic path to some kind of victory...but the violent beast within you has always cultivated some way to have chosen good over bad...You are not lost my friend...Your objective will always be more respected than the rest...Adding another candid thought..these verses could only be completely realised by the author himself adding so many horizons of thoughts arising from all dimensions adding more colour to your charms...But you know your greatness reflects when none can unleash the true tale inside...Thats why you will always find so many words to describe your feelings...I don't want to embarrass either of us giving reviews about your poem...Because you sure know how I feel about it...:)

[Frantzuu]

This is written so well.
"To the fact that life given and taken for free,"
I love this line, great poem. :D

Hmm. initially I had trouble deciding whether to take this as a dark write or not but then I decided on a somber shade .
Very nice write specially which I can relate to in some parts . The rhyme needs to be worked on in a few places but apart from that , the choice of words and phrases is awesome .. I particularly like :
"In the laboratory of fate.."