Next Time.. Care

If you cared, I couldve saved you

Your my one desire,

I wish you for my all entire,

I used to be your secret admire,

Secrets free,

Can't wait for you to see,

You're all I'v ever wished for,

All I ever dreamed,

If you showed some appreciation,

You could've lived to see tomorrows dawn,

No hard feelings,

We would be at heavens sake,

Together,

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

i like your rhyme scheme...because it isn't totally predictable yet it flows forward with its own little dance

[Needy]

Nice love poem :D

[Liza]

this was so smooth
i liked the way the poetry flowed
so much emotion
i saw the images
taking me up and back to earth
lovely

[KaySea]

impressive

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Having a crush could lead into some "CRUSH!!"...
i like the way you keep it subside and cool...

[PaperHearts]

Aww, what a sweet poem! I really liked the honesty and vulnerability that came across in this piece, and how the emotions seemed to escalate and strengthen as the poem progressed. There were a few typos/grammatical mistakes, and I found the commas to be a little distracting, but other than that, this was a great write! I really loved the way you ended this poem. The last two lines were beautiful. :)
~PaperHearts

[My Fair Lady]

You can only do so much to make things sweet for someone else before it starts to rob precious things from your relationship. Appreciation, respect and trust are so important. I like this.

[Maurice]

Very nice.

[deeps]

I like this it has pure emotion

[Norma M Sutton]

A different kind of poem. Not as flowing as some, but it works.