Never Can Such As You Be Born

Dedicated to a special friend.

Never Can Such As You Be Born

January spent in a somnolent cloak

Under the wings of abandoned dreams.

Vaudeville-watching on the banks of time,

Embers of joy quenched by apathetic streams.

Raconteurs recalled borrowed stories,

Iridescent rumors that stabbed my heart

As abeyance grabbed December's memories. Until...

 

You passed me by like a floating song,

Amber eyes, not a bit forlorn,

Stealing my reverie all day long,

Ending the darkness, ushering dawn.

Eclogue, valkyrie, ebullient song,

Never can such as you again be born.

Reviews

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Though I am not on here as much any more that doesn't stop me from stealing a few minutes to read such enrapturing poetry. Upon reading this piece, I find myself engrossed in the second stanza. I feel like time has done a cinematic slow-mo and passing before me eyes is that special love and all the beautifully engaging descriptions you have played along the reverie of my thoughts dancing their way in. (oh yeah, and her hair is dark and flowing too) The italics give rise to the sensation of that moment. I love the unexpected cadence in rhyme and interestingly niche metaphors. I admit I had to look up Raconteurs but I'm always happy to encounter new and delicious phrases which give even more depth and meaning to one's poetry. I love the sadness, the waning want and then the buds of stirring passion...

Keep on writing like this and more :)

[Dane Osborne]

Wow, you must be popular with the ladies. If I wrote love poems the way you do and went around reading them to girls then i would have venereal disease by now LOL

Serious, this had an impressive use of vocabulary and the flow sucked me in. The first stanza was quite perfect. You're a gifted man Abdul.

[Khaaki]

How beautiful!! I should have read it much before... The second stanza is a real treat...

[MuSe Ampoule]

Wow, really beautiful work here. Great job with this! You've made us really feel that moment where someone sets eyes on that special someone.

[FlawedByDesign]

You've pointed out the imagery present in some of my poems, but you truly put me to shame with what you evoke with your words. One cannot read this and be transported inside a dream to the banks of time and watch her float by like a song. The use of language is another forte of yours. Your construct is well thought out and descriptive. The only thing that might alienate people a bit, is the actual choice of words, since there were words within this poem that I needed to look up; but then again I like expanding my vocabulary :P

Nicely done.

[Alicante lullaby]

wow..Abdul,one in a while one reads such a delicate song from a male poet and wonder what caused it so...this one is truely inspired..your friend must be very lucky to have provoked so many wonderful words..an absolute delight to mind...lovely.
btw Valkyrie...wow.

[Dinesh Sairam]

I've been waiting for something like this from you. How does it feel to be 'longing for the love'? :P

Vaudeville, Raconteurs, abeyance, Eclogue were new for me. Thanks for adding to my vocab. =)

Just like all the others, I found myself more engrossed in the second stanza than the first one. But I didn't understand "Eclogue, valkyrie, ebullient song". Maybe you would find time to paraphrase.

I just figured out it's been long since I added to my library. This one is going =)

Keep writing.

[faryn wolff]

I wish I had more time to read it again (and I will come back to it later, as lovely as it is), but for now I'll say this a heavenly masterpiece. I'm awe-struck. Such intense emotion so beautifully summed up, flowing like a sweet melody. Wonderful...This is definitely among my favourites of yours. Thank you for sharing it.